自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and avoid repeating that you had a bike. Say “like many other children” rather than “as other children.” The key meaning is clear, but “writing” appears to be a slip for “riding.” Add one specific detail about when or where you used the bike, and keep the answer natural and concise.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, like many other children. It was pink and had training wheels because I was afraid of falling. I didn’t ride it very often, though, because I wasn’t particularly interested in cycling.

建议: Use the plural “bikes” when speaking generally, and say “primary school students” and “ride their bikes to school/the market.” Make your examples more specific and use a linking phrase such as “For example.” The final sentence is unfinished, so complete your point or leave it out; also avoid claiming cycling is safe without explaining why.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among older people and primary school students. For example, many students ride their bikes to school, while older people use them to go to the market or run errands. They’re a convenient way to travel short distances.

× Yes, as other children.

✓ Yes, like other children, I had my own bike when I was a child.

As written, this is a sentence fragment because it has no main verb. Use a complete clause, such as 'I had my own bike,' to answer the question. 'Like other children' is a natural way to introduce the comparison.

× Yes, bike is really popular in my country, especially among the elderly and the primary students.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country, especially among the elderly and primary school students.

When referring to bicycles in general, use the plural noun 'bikes' with the plural verb 'are.' Also, 'primary school students' is the natural general expression here; the definite article 'the' is unnecessary when referring to students as a group.

× They often bike to their school or bike to the market to get their daily needs and I think it's safe for the old people and.

✓ They often bike to school or to the market to get their daily needs, and I think it's safe for older people.

The final 'and' is left without a following clause, so remove it unless you continue the sentence with another complete idea. A comma before 'and' also helps separate the two independent clauses. For improvement, end the sentence after a complete thought.