自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答切题，也提到了小时候的自行车和父亲教你骑车的经历。需要重点改正时态：讲过去的经历时用过去式，例如“when I was a child”“my father taught me”；“write a bike”应为“ride a bike”。如果你指的是辅助轮，可以说“training wheels”，并用“take them off”表达拆掉辅助轮。建议删去重复表达，按“直接回答＋一两个具体细节”组织，控制在两三句。

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It had training wheels at first, and my father taught me how to ride it. Once I got better, he took the training wheels off, and I could ride on my own.

建议: 你给出了共享单车和校园通勤两个相关理由，内容具体且切题。注意名词单复数，泛指时用“bikes”；“write it back”应为“ride one”，而“instead of working”应为“instead of walking”。表达“公共交通不方便覆盖最后一段路”时，可以说“public transport doesn’t take you all the way to your destination”。删掉“umm”等填充词，并用“also”自然连接校园里的例子。

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in China, especially shared bikes. They’re convenient for the last part of a journey when public transport doesn’t take you all the way to your destination. They’re also widely used for getting around university campuses.

× Yeah, I used to have a bike when I am a child and my first bike is the ones that have two wheels that can help you to keep the balance.

✓ Yeah, I used to have a bike when I was a child, and my first bike was one that had two wheels that could help you keep your balance.

这句话描述的是童年经历，应该使用过去时。这里的“am”应改为“was”，“is”应改为“was”；描述那辆自行车的情况时，“have”也应与过去的语境保持一致，改为“had”。

× Yeah, I used to have a bike when I am a child and my first bike is the ones that have two wheels that can help you to keep the balance.

✓ Yeah, I used to have a bike when I was a child, and my first bike was one that had two wheels that could help you keep your balance.

“my first bike”是单数，因此后面应使用单数代词“one”，不能用复数“ones”。注意代词的单复数要与它所指代的名词保持一致。

× And when I grow up and my father tell me how to get rid of these two eight reels so I can write a normal bike now.

✓ When I grew up, my father told me how to get rid of these two eight reels, so I can write a normal bike now.

“长大”和“父亲告诉我”都是过去发生的事情，因此应分别使用过去式“grew”和“told”。句末的“now”表示现在的情况，所以“can”可以保留。

× Oh, bike is really popular in China 'cause umm, we have shared bikes and it means that when you want to go to some place and it's not be easy to get for the last distance with the public transportation, you can just write it back instead of working.

✓ Oh, bikes are really popular in China 'cause umm, we have shared bikes and it means that when you want to go to some place and it's not easy to get for the last distance with public transportation, you can just write it back instead of working.

这里是在泛指自行车这一类事物，应使用复数“bikes”，并将对应的动词“is”改为“are”。泛指某一类事物时，通常可以使用复数名词。

× Oh, bike is really popular in China 'cause umm, we have shared bikes and it means that when you want to go to some place and it's not be easy to get for the last distance with the public transportation, you can just write it back instead of working.

✓ Oh, bikes are really popular in China 'cause umm, we have shared bikes and it means that when you want to go to some place and it's not easy to get for the last distance with public transportation, you can just write it back instead of working.

“it's not be easy”把“is”和动词原形“be”错误地连在了一起。此处“easy”是形容词，直接用“it's not easy”即可。修改时要避免在系动词“is”后再加一个原形“be”。

× Oh, bike is really popular in China 'cause umm, we have shared bikes and it means that when you want to go to some place and it's not be easy to get for the last distance with the public transportation, you can just write it back instead of working.

✓ Oh, bikes are really popular in China 'cause umm, we have shared bikes and it means that when you want to go to some place and it's not easy to get for the last distance with public transportation, you can just write it back instead of working.

“public transportation”在这里泛指公共交通，前面通常不加定冠词“the”。说一般性的交通方式时，可以直接使用“by public transportation”或“with public transportation”。

× And in the campus we also have bikes for commute.

✓ And on campus we also have bikes for commuting.

表示“在校园里”通常使用“on campus”，而不是“in the campus”。介词搭配需要结合固定表达记忆，例如“on campus”。

× And in the campus we also have bikes for commute.

✓ And on campus we also have bikes for commuting.

“for”后面如果接动词，通常要使用动名词形式，因此“commute”应改为“commuting”。可以记住“for + 动词-ing”这一常见结构。