自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Ответьте прямо на вопрос и исправьте слово «write» на «ride»: здесь нужно сказать, что вы катались на велосипеде. Избегайте повторов и незаконченных самокоррекций вроде «It was my the most it was my…». Добавьте конкретную деталь — например, где вы катались или как часто. Используйте естественную конструкцию «my favorite activity».

示例: Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike with my friends after school. It was one of my favorite activities, especially in the summer.

建议: Ваш ответ обрывается, поэтому завершите мысль и прямо скажите, популярны ли велосипеды в России. Вместо неестественного «don't care about riding and bike» используйте «don't cycle very often» или «cycling isn't very popular». Сравнение с европейскими странами сформулируйте яснее: например, скажите, что велосипедами там пользуются чаще. Уберите повторы и заполнители «uh».

示例: To be honest, I wouldn't say that bikes are very popular in Russia. Compared with many European countries, fewer people here use them for everyday travel. However, cycling is becoming more popular in parks and during the warmer months.

× It was my the most it was my top choice activity, um, in the past.

✓ It was my top-choice activity in the past.

The possessive determiner my cannot be used together with the article the before the same noun phrase. The sentence also restarts mid-phrase; remove the abandoned wording and use one complete phrase.

× If compare if we compare with uh European countries in Russia

✓ If we compare Russia with European countries

The first attempt, If compare, is missing a subject. In the repeated version, make the comparison clear by placing the two things being compared after compare: compare Russia with European countries.

× riding and bike

✓ riding bikes

When referring to bikes in general, use the plural count noun bikes. The original also joins riding and bike in a way that does not form a grammatical phrase.

× so I wouldn't say if it's quite

✓ so I wouldn't say that bikes are very popular.

The clause is incomplete, and if does not correctly introduce the intended statement here. Use that to introduce the claim, and include a complete clause with a subject and verb.