自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and then explain why you wanted the bike. Use past-tense forms such as “begged” and “wanted,” and say “I had one” rather than “I had.” Avoid repeating “because” and reduce fillers. You can also describe what you did with the bike to add a specific detail.

示例: Yes, I had a red bike when I was a child. My dad bought it for me after I begged him for one because I loved a cartoon about bike racing. I used to ride it around the neighborhood and pretend I was in a race.

建议: Give a complete direct answer instead of the fragment “especially for kids,” and support it with a clear reason or example. Use “ride a bike,” not “write a bike,” and reduce fillers. To make your answer more relevant to the question, explain whether bikes are popular with adults as well as children.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. When I was young, I often rode my bike around town with my friends. Many adults also use bikes for short trips because they are convenient and inexpensive.

× Yes, I had, it's a red one.

✓ Yes, I had one; it was a red one.

The question asks about a bike you had as a child, so use the past-tense verb was rather than the present-tense verb is. Adding one also makes the response complete and clear.

× My dad bought it for me because I beg him to.

✓ My dad bought it for me because I begged him to.

The event happened in the past, as shown by bought, so beg should also be in the past tense: begged.

× I watched a cartoon about bike racing and I want to do like that.

✓ I watched a cartoon about bike racing and wanted to do something like that.

The student is describing a childhood experience, so wanted is more consistent with the past-tense context than want. Use do something like that, rather than do like that, to express wanting to imitate an activity.