自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你直接回答了问题，也提供了骑车上学和父母看法等相关细节。不过，句子中有明显的自我修正和语法错误，例如“which makes my which made”以及“I had develop a”，而且最后一句没有说完。建议使用过去时描述童年经历（如“rode”），删去重复内容，并在完成一个清晰的补充细节后结束回答。

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to school when I was about ten, which made me feel quite independent. My parents also liked that I could get around on my own.

建议: 你表达了明确观点，并尝试用交通拥堵解释自行车受欢迎的原因，但回答在句尾中断，影响完整性。“traffic is very often”表达不自然，可改为“there is often heavy traffic”；“on the rush hour”应改为“during rush hour”，“a bicycle tend”应改为“riding a bicycle tends”。建议补充一个具体结果，例如骑车能节省通勤时间，并用完整句子结束回答。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in busy cities. There is often heavy traffic during rush hour, so cycling can be a convenient way to get around. It can also save people time on short journeys.

× I often Rd. the bike to school when I was only 10 years old, which makes my which made my parents think I was more independent.

✓ I often rode the bike to school when I was only 10 years old, which made my parents think I was more independent.

这段话描述的是童年时发生的事情，应使用一般过去时。这里应将“Rd.”改为“rode”，并将“makes”改为“made”。“which makes my”看起来是说话时的重复或自我修正，整理时可以删去。

× Umm and I had develop a.

✓ Umm, and I had developed a…

助动词“had”后面应接动词的过去分词。“develop”的过去分词是“developed”，所以应改为“had developed”。原句在“a”之后没有说完，因此用省略号表示话语中断。

× Of course our uh, traffic is very often because we often have traffic jams.

✓ Of course, our traffic is often very heavy because we often have traffic jams.

“often”表示频率，不能自然地放在“traffic is very often”这个结构中描述交通状况。描述交通拥堵程度时应使用形容词“heavy”；可以说“traffic is often very heavy”（交通经常很拥堵）。

× …we often have traffic jams, umm, on the rush hour…

✓ …we often have traffic jams, umm, during rush hour…

表示“在高峰时段”通常说“during rush hour”，不说“on the rush hour”。这里应使用介词“during”，且“rush hour”前通常不加“the”。

× …so riding a bicycle tend to be a good way to.

✓ …so riding a bicycle tends to be a good way to…

“riding a bicycle”是动名词短语，在句中作主语，通常看作单数，因此后面的动词应使用第三人称单数形式“tends”，而不是“tend”。原句末尾的话没有说完，所以用省略号保留未完成的表达。