自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and use the past tense consistently. The phrase “I tried first I tried my bicycle” is unclear; say when you first learned to ride. Add one specific detail about how you felt or what happened, and finish the sentence instead of ending with “to.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, although I didn’t learn to ride it until I was 12. I was quite nervous at first because I fell off several times. However, I kept practicing, and eventually I learned to ride confidently.

建议: Use “my country” rather than “my countries,” and say “own a car” or “own cars.” Explain the relationship between public transport and bicycles clearly; avoid repeating “public transportation.” Use “short trips” and “go shopping,” and complete your answer with a specific example.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for short trips. Many people use public transportation for longer journeys, but ride bikes to nearby shops or work. They’re affordable and convenient, particularly in busy areas.

× Yes, uh, I tried first I tried my bicycle was when I was 12 years old and it was a very scary moment.

✓ Yes. The first time I rode a bicycle was when I was 12 years old, and it was a very scary moment.

The original combines several clauses without a clear grammatical structure. Use a complete clause such as The first time I rode a bicycle was when... to introduce the memory.

× First time when I try I fell down again and again, but I try my best to.

✓ The first time I tried, I fell down again and again, but I tried my best.

The speaker is describing a past experience, so try should be in the past tense: tried. Keep the verbs in the account consistently in the past tense.

× First time when I try I fell down again and again, but I try my best to.

✓ The first time I tried, I fell down again and again, but I tried my best.

The final to is left without the verb or action it would introduce, making the sentence incomplete. Omit to if the intended meaning is complete, or follow it with an infinitive, such as to learn.

× Yes, in my countries bikes are very popular because uh you know most of the people don't own the car.

✓ Yes, in my country, bikes are very popular because, you know, most people do not own cars.

Use the singular country when referring to the speaker’s home country. Cars should be plural because the statement refers generally to people not owning a car.

× Uh we use the public transportation instead of using the public transportation when we want to go like uh short um short play short trips uh we use bicycles to go shoppings or

✓ We use public transportation, and when we want to go on short trips, we use bicycles.

When public transportation is used as a general, uncountable term, it normally does not take the definite article the. Use public transportation rather than the public transportation.

× We use bicycles to go shoppings.

✓ We use bicycles to go shopping.

After go, use the -ing form shopping to describe this activity. Shopping is not pluralized in this expression.