自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答与问题不符：考官问的是童年时有没有自行车，但你一直在描述书包。请先直接回答“Yes, I did”或“No, I didn’t”，然后补充自行车是谁送的、外观或你如何使用。注意用过去时，例如“gave”“was”，并避免重复表达喜欢。

示例: Yes, I did. My father gave me a blue bike for my tenth birthday, and I was thrilled to receive it. I used to ride it to school and around my neighborhood.

建议: 你表达了自行车很受欢迎的观点，但部分词语难以理解，而且句子结构和语法错误较多。请先清楚回答“很受欢迎”，再说明具体原因，例如通勤方便、费用低或有助于锻炼；可用“because”“for example”等连接信息。注意使用正确搭配，如“ride bikes”而不是“read backs”。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in smaller cities. They’re an affordable and convenient way to get to school or work, and they’re also good for people’s health.

× when I, umm, 10 years old

✓ when I was 10 years old

这里是在回忆童年，应用过去时。原句缺少过去式 be 动词 was。可以记住表达年龄时使用“主语 + be + 年龄”，例如：I was 10 years old.

× my father, umm, uh, give me a bag and that is white and black.

✓ My father gave me a bag, and it was white and black.

句子叙述的是过去发生的事情，因此 give 应改为过去式 gave，is 应改为 was。这里用 it 指代前面的 bag，使指代更清楚。

× I very like it that my birthday present.

✓ I really liked it as my birthday present.

very 通常不能直接修饰动词 like；表达“非常喜欢”应使用 really like。可以使用“really + 动词”这个结构，例如：I really like it.

× I very like it that my birthday present.

✓ I really liked it as my birthday present.

这里要表达“把它作为生日礼物”，应使用介词 as，不能用 that 连接。可以记住表达身份或用途时常用“as + 名词”，例如：I got it as a present.

× I very like it that my birthday present.

✓ I really liked it as my birthday present.

这句话描述过去收到礼物时的感受，因此 like 应使用过去式 liked。叙述过去的经历时，相关动词通常也要保持过去时。

× I very like this bag when I am a child.

✓ I really liked this bag when I was a child.

very 不能直接修饰动词 like，应改用 really 修饰 liked。表达“非常喜欢”时，可以使用“really + 动词”。

× I very like this bag when I am a child.

✓ I really liked this bag when I was a child.

when I was a child 指过去的时间，所以主句中的 like 应改为 liked，从句中的 am 应改为 was。谈论过去时，主句和时间从句的时态应相互一致。

× everyone usually read backs, umm, go to school and work.

✓ Everyone usually rides bikes to school and work.

根据上下文，这里按“大家通常骑自行车上学和上班”来理解。everyone 在语法上是单数，所以动词应使用 rides，而不是 ride 或 read；表达去上学、上班可说 go to school and work。注意：原文中的“read backs”可能是转写错误。

× That is very popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country.

这里谈论的是复数的 bikes，用单数代词 That 指代不合适。直接重复名词 Bikes 可以避免单复数指代不一致。