自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then add a few clear details. Use “It was red” rather than “It was red color,” and “riding it down the hills” rather than “writing it down the hills.” Avoid fillers such as “uh,” and connect the details smoothly.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was red and quite old, and I kept it at my grandma’s house. I remember riding it down the hills with my cousins, which was always exciting.

建议: Your answer gives a clear opinion and a relevant contrast, but some phrases are unnatural. Say “the infrastructure is not very suitable for cycling” instead of “the environment around is not very well adjusted,” and use “a form of transport” rather than “a transportation.” Remove the filler and avoid repeating that people have bikes and go for rides.

示例: Bikes are not very popular as a form of transport in my country because the roads and cycling infrastructure are not very suitable. However, many people do cycle for fun, especially in parks. They often go for rides at weekends.

× It was red color.

✓ It was red in color.

When describing an object's color with the phrase color, use the preposition in: red in color. You can also simply say It was red.

× The environment around is not very well adjusted for using bikes as a transportation.

✓ The environment around is not very well adjusted for using bikes as transportation.

Transportation is generally an uncountable noun when referring to transportation in general, so it does not take the indefinite article a. Use as transportation, not as a transportation.

× Uh, though many people do this as a hobby, they have bikes, they go for a ride to parks.

✓ Uh, though many people do this as a hobby, they have bikes and go for a ride to parks.

The original joins two independent clauses with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Join the clauses with a coordinating conjunction such as and, or separate them into two sentences.