自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then give one or two relevant details. Avoid repeating that it was your first bike and a birthday gift, since these points overlap. Use the natural phrase “It had a few gears” instead of “had few gears to it,” and keep the past tense consistent when describing your childhood memories.

示例: Yes, I did. My mum gave me a red bike for my 12th birthday, and it was my first one. It had a few gears, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood.

建议: Give a direct answer and support it with a clear reason or example. Avoid repeating “bikes” and “easy,” and correct the broken phrase “they're easy to they're easy on the pocket.” You could say “they’re affordable to buy” or “they don’t cost much to run.”

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in busy cities. They’re easy to maneuver through traffic and are relatively affordable to buy and maintain. That makes them a convenient option for short trips.

× It was red in color, had few gears to it.

✓ It was red in color and had a few gears.

Use a few to mean that the bike had some gears. Few without a is grammatical but usually means almost none. The correction also removes the unnecessary phrase to it.

× It was red in color, had few gears to it.

✓ It was red in color and had a few gears.

The second clause needs an explicit subject. Adding and had makes the two clauses parallel and complete.

× Along with that I have pretty good memories with the bike because that was my first bike and it was a birthday gift from my mom when I was 12.

✓ I have pretty good memories of the bike because it was my first bike and a birthday gift from my mom when I was 12.

Use memories of the bike, rather than memories with the bike, to describe memories associated with it. The preposition of is the natural choice here.

× Bikes are the most convenient mode of transportation because they're easy to maneuver, they're easy to they're easy on the pocket when you have to buy one.

✓ Bikes are the most convenient mode of transportation because they're easy to maneuver and easy on the pocket to buy.

The phrase they're easy to they're easy on the pocket contains a repeated and incomplete clause. Remove the repetition and join the two reasons with and. The corrected wording also makes clear that buying a bike is affordable.