自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答切题，也提到了自行车和父母带你去练习，但时态和句子结构错误较多，影响理解。谈过去的经历时要用过去时，例如把“I'll have”改为“I had”，把“practice”改为“practised”。避免重复“practice”，并用简单连接词组织细节，例如“when I had free time”和“because”。

示例: Yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. When I had free time, my parents often took me to the playground to practise riding it. I enjoyed it because it was fun.

建议: 回答直接，并给出了环保这一理由，逻辑基本清楚。可以删去“mm-hmm”和“uh”等填充词；“a green way”前需要冠词，且“a lot of people”与骑车流行之间的联系还可以说明得更具体，例如提到短途出行或减少污染。

示例: Yes, cycling is quite popular in China, especially for short trips. Since many people live in crowded cities, bikes are a convenient way to get to work or school. They also help reduce traffic and air pollution.

× Yes, I'll have a little bike and I often practice riding a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a little bike, and I often practiced riding it.

这句话描述的是童年经历，应该使用过去时。将“I'll have”改为“I had”，将“practice”改为“practiced”。

× When we have we are free and my mother and the father took me to the playground and the practice practice my bike.

✓ When we were free, my mother and father took me to the playground, and I practiced riding my bike.

句子讲述过去的童年经历，因此应将“have”和“are”改为过去式“were”，并将“practice”改为“practiced”。描述过去发生的动作时，注意整句话的时态保持一致。

× When we have we are free and my mother and the father took me to the playground and the practice practice my bike.

✓ When we were free, my mother and father took me to the playground, and I practiced riding my bike.

“my mother and the father”中的“the”多余。表示“我妈妈和爸爸”时，通常说“my mother and father”，不需要在“father”前再加冠词。

× When we have we are free and my mother and the father took me to the playground and the practice practice my bike.

✓ When we were free, my mother and father took me to the playground, and I practiced riding my bike.

原句中“When we have we are free”词序混乱，而且“and the practice practice my bike”缺少正确的主语并重复了“practice”。建议先说清时间状语“When we were free”，再用完整的主谓结构表达后续动作。

× I think it's very interesting.

✓ I thought it was very interesting.

这里评价的是过去的童年经历，因此应将“think”和“is”分别改为过去式“thought”和“was”。

× Yes, mm-hmm I think riding a bike in my country is very popular because I live in China and uh there are a lot of people so riding a bike is green way to work or to go to school and uh it's good for our environment.

✓ Yes, mm-hmm, I think riding a bike in my country is very popular because I live in China, and there are a lot of people, so riding a bike is a green way to get to work or school, and it's good for our environment.

“way”是可数名词单数，前面需要加不定冠词“a”，因此应说“a green way”。