自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then describe how you learned to ride. Avoid fillers such as “uh” and “umm,” and replace unnatural phrases like “got my hands on that” with “practised riding it.” Finish the final thought clearly; for example, explain that you started riding on two wheels. Use linking words such as “at first” and “eventually” to make the sequence easy to follow.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. At first, it had two small training wheels to help me keep my balance. After practising for a while, I took them off and learned to ride on two wheels.

建议: Give a clear reason why bikes are popular, such as affordability, convenience, or traffic congestion. Your comments about people breaking rules and accidents do not directly explain their popularity, and “that’s why” is repeated without a clear conclusion. If you want to mention safety, connect it to the topic and explain the link briefly.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in busy cities. They’re relatively affordable and make it easier to get around in heavy traffic. However, riders need to follow traffic rules to reduce the risk of accidents.

× And then after some time when I got my hands on that and practiced balance so the I removed the umm, 2 wheels and started.

✓ After some time, when I got my hands on it and practiced balancing, I removed the two wheels and started riding.

When you mean training to keep your balance while riding, use the -ing form balancing after practiced. The corrected sentence also completes the idea after started by specifying the activity: started riding.

× And then after some time when I got my hands on that and practiced balance so the I removed the umm, 2 wheels and started.

✓ After some time, when I got my hands on it and practiced balancing, I removed the two wheels and started riding.

The word when introduces a dependent clause, so do not add so before the main clause in this construction. Connect the clauses by placing the main clause directly after the dependent clause. In future answers, use either a when-clause followed by the main clause or a separate so-clause, but avoid combining them this way.