自行车— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
考生
Yes, I had a bike uh when I was a child, but it, it wasn't easy to get a bike because we were broke. You know uh, I asked for my family a lot of times uh to please get me a bike, but after then uh.
考官
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
考生
Definitely, definitely. I think it is because, uh, the city we live in, in, uh, it is flattened. So, uh, rather than a car or bus transportation, we usually use bicycle. It is so cheap and effective.
评估
总分
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
分数: 38.0建议: Yanıtınız soruya doğrudan cevap veriyor ve ailenizin maddi durumuyla ilgili bir neden sunuyor; ancak son cümle tamamlanmamış. “I asked my family” ve “after then” ifadeleri doğal değil. Tekrarları ve “uh” gibi dolgu seslerini azaltın, ardından bisikleti sonunda alıp almadığınızı belirterek yanıtı tamamlayın. İki veya üç net cümle yeterli olur.
示例: Yes, I had a bike as a child, although my family couldn’t afford one easily. I asked my parents for one several times, and they eventually bought me a second-hand bike.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
分数: 57.0建议: Fikrinizi açıkça belirtiyor ve bisikletlerin ekonomik ve kullanışlı olmasını neden olarak veriyorsunuz. Ancak “the city ... is flattened” yerine “the city is flat” demelisiniz; “use bicycle” ifadesi de “use bicycles” veya “ride bicycles” şeklinde olmalı. Tekrarları azaltın ve açıklamanızı doğal bağlaçlarla, örneğin “because” ve “also” ile geliştirin. Ülkenizdeki başka bir kullanım alanına kısa bir örnek ekleyebilirsiniz.
示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities with flat terrain. They’re an affordable and convenient way to get around, and many people use them for short trips to work or the shops.
语法
× I asked for my family a lot of times to please get me a bike.
✓ I asked my family many times to please get me a bike.
The verb ask takes a direct object when you ask someone to do something: ask my family, not ask for my family. Use many times rather than a lot of times for a more concise expression.
× I think it is because the city we live in, it is flattened.
✓ I think it is because the city we live in is flat.
The city we live in is already the subject of the clause, so adding it creates a redundant second subject. Connect the subject directly to its verb: the city we live in is flat.
× Rather than a car or bus transportation, we usually use bicycle.
✓ Rather than using cars or buses, we usually use bicycles.
When speaking generally about bicycles as a means of transport, use the plural bicycles rather than the singular bicycle without an article. Cars and buses are also plural here to make the comparison consistent.
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