自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then add a clear memory. Use past-tense forms consistently: say “after I came home” and “I rode it,” not “after I come back” or “writing it.” Avoid repetition by reducing the repeated “used to,” and use the natural phrase “my favorite thing” rather than “my most favorite thing.”

示例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was bright red, and it was one of my favorite things. After I came home from school, I often rode around the neighborhood with my friends. We sometimes stayed out for hours without noticing how much time had passed.

建议: Your answer gives relevant reasons, but improve subject–verb agreement: “almost everyone owns.” Make the phrasing more natural by saying “children ride them around the neighborhood” and “good for children’s physical development.” Use a linking phrase such as “Besides that” to introduce the second benefit, and avoid repeating “child” and “kid.”

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Almost every child seems to own one, and they often ride around their neighborhood. Parents encourage cycling because it helps children stay active and develop physically. Besides that, it gives them a fun way to spend time outdoors and a little independence.

× It was bright red in color and it was my most favorite thing.

✓ It was bright red in color, and it was my favorite thing.

Favorite already expresses the superlative idea, so most favorite is redundant. Use favorite without most.

× Every day after I come back home from school, I used to go out with my friends and we used to take a round of the neighborhood and I used to spend hours and hours writing it without realizing that I have been spending so much time.

✓ Every day after I came back home from school, I used to go out with my friends and we used to take a round of the neighborhood and I used to spend hours and hours writing it without realizing that I had been spending so much time.

The sentence describes a repeated past routine, so come should be changed to the past form came. The time spent occurred before the past moment of realizing, so use the past perfect continuous had been spending instead of the present perfect continuous have been spending.

× Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country because when I look around kids these days, almost everyone own a bicycle and they are always riding here and there in the neighborhood.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country because when I look around at kids these days, almost everyone owns a bicycle and they are always riding here and there in the neighborhood.

Everyone is grammatically singular, even though it refers to many people. Therefore, the present-tense verb needs the third-person singular form owns.