自行车— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
考生
Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, so it was gifted to me by my father. It was a black Yamaha ViPRG 125.
考官
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
考生
Yes, bikes are really popular here. It's the major source of transport here. Since we have smaller streets here, so it's difficult to access these streets with big cars, that's the major reason of their popularity here.
评估
总分
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
分数: 68.0建议: Answer directly, then add one relevant detail. The phrase “so it was gifted to me” is awkward because “so” does not show a clear result here. Say “It was a gift from my father” or “My father gave it to me.” You could also briefly mention how you used it.
示例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My father gave me a black Yamaha ViPRG 125, and I used to ride it around our neighborhood.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
分数: 65.0建议: Your answer gives a clear opinion and a relevant reason, but “here” is repeated several times, and “since” should not be paired with “so” in this sentence. Use “a major form of transport” rather than “the major source of transport,” and make the reason more concise and natural.
示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country and are a major form of transport. Many streets are quite narrow, so bikes are easier to maneuver than cars, especially in busy areas.
语法
× It's the major source of transport here.
✓ They are a major means of transport here.
The sentence refers to bikes, which is plural, so the singular pronoun and verb in It's do not agree with the subject. Use they are. The phrase a major means of transport is also a natural way to express this idea.
× Since we have smaller streets here, so it's difficult to access these streets with big cars, that's the major reason of their popularity here.
✓ Since we have smaller streets here, it's difficult to access them with big cars. That's the major reason for their popularity here.
Since already introduces the reason, so is unnecessary in the same clause. Also, use for after reason in this expression: the reason for their popularity.
× Since we have smaller streets here, so it's difficult to access these streets with big cars, that's the major reason of their popularity here.
✓ Since we have smaller streets here, it's difficult to access them with big cars. That's the major reason for their popularity here.
The original joins two complete clauses with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Separate them with a period or connect them with an appropriate conjunction. The correction also removes the unnecessary so after since.
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