自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 先直接回答问题，并用过去时描述童年经历：说“我小时候有一辆自行车”。注意使用“a bike”，而不是“back”；“got”或“received”比“sent”更适合表达收到礼物。删去重复内容，并把“very bad”改成符合语境的“very happy”或“excited”。最后补充一个具体细节，例如和朋友骑车，控制在两到三句。

示例: Yes, I did. My father gave me a bike for my birthday when I was a child, and I was really excited. I often rode it around the neighborhood with my friends.

建议: 开头直接回答，并注意主谓一致和名词单复数：可以说“bikes are popular”“many students ride bikes”“some workers commute by bike”。避免重复“go”，并用“healthy”或“good for our health”表达健康益处。保留一个具体原因，再用连接词补充另一个好处，让回答简洁清楚。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many students ride them to school, and some workers use them to commute because cycling is convenient and affordable. It’s also a good way to stay healthy.

× Yes when I was child I have back and my father sent sent me a bike as a birthday birthday gift.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I have back and my father sent me a bike as a birthday gift.

可数名词 child 单数形式前需要冠词 a，因此应说“a child”。

× Yes when I was child I have back and my father sent sent me a bike as a birthday birthday gift.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a bike, and my father sent me a bike as a birthday gift.

句子讲的是童年发生的事情，应使用过去时。have 的过去式是 had；根据上下文，back 应为 bike。

× So I feel very bad and very happy and I always ride back with my ride back with my friend and it bring me happiness.

✓ So I felt very bad and very happy, and I always rode my bike with my friend, and it brought me happiness.

这句话描述童年时的感受和经历，应使用过去时：feel 改为 felt，ride 改为 rode，bring 改为 brought。根据上下文，back 应为 bike。

× Yes, I think it's very popular in my country because many students ride bike to go to school and some worker or ride back to go go to the company.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many students ride bikes to school, and some workers also ride bikes to work.

这里泛指许多自行车和工人，应使用复数 bikes 和 workers。可数名词单数 bike 不能直接用于 ride bike 这种表达中。

× Yes, I think it's very popular in my country because many students ride bike to go to school and some worker or ride back to go go to the company.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many students ride bikes to school, and some workers also ride bikes to work.

“some worker or ride back to go go to the company”结构不完整且表达不清。可用“some workers also ride bikes to work”组成完整、自然的并列分句。

× I think it's easy and convenient and it's can bring us the healthy and make us help keep healthy.

✓ I think they are easy and convenient, and they can improve our health and help us stay healthy.

情态动词 can 前不能使用 is 的缩写 it's。应说“they can”；这里 they 指前文提到的自行车。

× I think it's easy and convenient and it's can bring us the healthy and make us help keep healthy.

✓ I think they are easy and convenient, and they can improve our health and help us stay healthy.

healthy 是形容词，不能直接作“健康”这一名词使用。表达“改善我们的健康”时应使用名词 health，例如“improve our health”。

× I think it's easy and convenient and it's can bring us the healthy and make us help keep healthy.

✓ I think they are easy and convenient, and they can improve our health and help us stay healthy.

“the healthy”不是正确的名词表达。此处应使用名词 health，并且通常不需要在 health 前加 the。