自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly using the past tense: “I didn’t have a bike.” Then give one clear reason or detail. Avoid repeating yourself and use “as a child” rather than “when I was child.”

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I didn’t have many safe places to ride one in my area, so I usually played other games instead.

建议: Give a direct answer, use the plural form “bikes,” and add a specific, relevant example. “Young people” is more natural than “youngsters,” and you can say “make vlogs” rather than “do vlog.”

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many young people, including women, ride them for transport or recreation. Some even film their rides and post the videos online.

× Simply, I don't have had a bike when I was child because I'm from Belize and there are no, no many facilities where I can ride a bike.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I'm from Belize, and there were not many facilities where I could ride a bike.

The question asks about the past, so use the simple past didn't have rather than don't have had. Use were and could to describe the facilities and ability in the past. The phrase no, no many is not grammatical; not many is the correct form.

× Simply, I don't have had a bike when I was child because I'm from Belize and there are no, no many facilities where I can ride a bike.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I'm from Belize, and there were not many facilities where I could ride a bike.

Child is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a child.

× there are no, no many facilities where I can ride a bike

✓ There were not many facilities where I could ride a bike.

No and many cannot be combined in this way. Use not many to mean that the number of facilities was small.

× Although there are no facilities, umm, when I'm, uh, when I, when I was very little.

✓ There were no facilities when I was very little.

The original is an incomplete although-clause and does not form a complete sentence. Remove although and state the idea as a complete independent clause.

× Yes, of course bike are very popular in our country. Many youngsters including uh ladies also ride bike in our country.

✓ Yes, of course, bikes are very popular in our country. Many youngsters, including ladies, also ride bikes in our country.

Use the plural noun bikes when referring to bikes in general. The plural noun also agrees with are.

× They used to do vlog.

✓ They used to make vlogs.

Vlog is a countable noun here, so it needs a plural form when referring to this activity in general. Make vlogs is also the natural expression for creating them.

× They use vlogging for their career.

✓ They use vlogging as a career.

Use as to describe vlogging as the work or profession. For does not express that meaning naturally in this sentence.