自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Yanıtınız doğrudan başlıyor; ancak çok sayıda duraksama, tekrar ve kendini düzeltme konuşmanın akıcılığını azaltıyor. “I had used my sister’s bikes” yerine “I used my sister’s bike” deyin. Cümlenizi tamamlayıp babanızın size ne aldığını açıkça belirtin. Kısa ve net bir yanıt vermeye çalışın.

示例: Yes, I did. I used my sister’s bike for about two years, and then my dad bought me my own. I really enjoyed riding it as a child.

建议: Fikrinizi belirtmişsiniz, ancak “On my observation” doğal bir ifade değildir; “In my opinion” kullanabilirsiniz. “Draw car” yerine “drive cars” deyin ve bisiklet kullanımını neden az bulduğunuzu açıklayın. Yanıtınız yarım kaldığı için düşüncenizi tamamlayın; destekleyici bir örnek ekleyip gereksiz tekrarları azaltın.

示例: In my opinion, bikes aren’t very popular in my country. Most people prefer to drive cars or walk, especially in busy cities. Cycling is more common in parks and quieter areas.

× It's actually I have I had used my sister's bikes for two years.

✓ Actually, I used my sister's bikes for two years.

The speaker is describing a completed period in the past, so the simple past tense used is appropriate. The repeated forms are disfluencies; use one clear past-tense verb.

× On my observation, bikes are not popular in my country.

✓ Based on my observations, bikes are not popular in my country.

On is not the natural preposition in this expression. Use based on to introduce the evidence or experience that informs your view.

× In my country, usually draw car or walking on the street.

✓ In my country, people usually drive cars or walk on the street.

The original clause is missing a subject, so it does not form a complete sentence. It also needs a clear verb phrase. Include a subject such as people and use parallel verbs, drive and walk, to describe the two activities.