自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly in the past tense: say “Yes, I did.” Keep the topic consistent—use “bike,” not “bag”—and avoid repeating “so” and “always.” Explain who gave you the bike and add one clear detail about riding with your sister. Use a natural phrase such as “my sister had one too.”

示例: Yes, I did. My mum gave me a bike for my birthday, and I loved riding it. Whenever I got bored, I would go for a ride with my sister, who had a bike too.

建议: Give a clear opinion first, using “bikes are” rather than “bike is.” Be precise when comparing bikes and skateboards: a skateboard is not a vehicle in the same sense as a bike, so describe it as a popular activity or mode of transport if that is what you mean. Remove repeated phrases and add one specific reason or example.

示例: Bikes aren’t especially popular where I live, although you can still see people riding them in parks. Skateboarding seems more common among children and students, especially as a recreational activity. I think that’s because it’s easy to do in local parks.

× Uh yes I do.

✓ Uh, yes, I did.

The question asks about a past situation, so use the past-tense auxiliary did rather than the present-tense do.

× I do have a bag when I was a child.

✓ I had a bag when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child establishes a past time, so use had instead of do have. In past-tense statements, use the past form of the main verb without do.

× So I always find that whenever I get bored, I always ride my bike with my sister that she also has bite herself.

✓ So I always found that whenever I got bored, I rode my bike with my sister, who also had a bike herself.

The student is describing a childhood habit, so use the past forms found, got, rode, and had. The corrected relative clause is included here as well; the pronoun issue is explained separately.

× with my sister that she also has bite herself.

✓ with my sister, who also had a bike herself.

Use who to refer to a person in a relative clause. The pronoun she is redundant because who already serves as the subject of the clause.

× Honestly, bike is not that popular in my country.

✓ Honestly, bikes are not that popular in my country.

The sentence refers to bikes as a general category, so use the plural noun bikes and the plural verb are.

× One of the most famous, I would say, vehicle in my country is skateboarding.

✓ One of the most famous, I would say, vehicles in my country is skateboarding.

After one of the most, the noun must be plural. Use vehicles rather than vehicle.

× It is what usually students use or children use to play in the park.

✓ It is what students or children usually use to play in the park.

Usually should be placed after the subject or before the main verb. Here, it naturally follows the compound subject students or children.