自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then add one clear detail. Avoid repeating words and fillers such as “I, I” and “umm.” The phrase “about me very a brand new bike” is unclear; use “bought me a brand-new bike” if that is what you mean. Also, explain briefly what you remember about the bike or how you used it.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was in primary school, my mum bought me a brand-new bike. I used to ride it around my neighbourhood after school.

建议: State your opinion clearly at the beginning, and replace unclear phrases such as “I didn’t know much about before” and “I can see every time.” Support your answer with a specific observation, such as seeing commuters cycling during rush hour. Use linking words like “for example” or “because,” and avoid unnecessary fillers.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, I often see people cycling to work during the morning rush hour. They’re a convenient and affordable way to get around, especially in busy cities.

× My mom took me to a city centre and about me, uh, very a brand new bike.

✓ My mom took me to a city centre and bought me a brand-new bike.

The words after and do not form a grammatical clause. Use the verb bought to express what your mother did. The correction assumes that about was intended to be bought.

× I didn't know much about before.

✓ I didn't know much about bikes before.

The preposition about needs an object here. Add bikes to make clear what you did not know much about.

× Now I have a bike and then I know something about it.

✓ Now I have a bike, so I know something about it.

Then usually refers to a later time or the next event. So expresses the cause-and-effect relationship between having a bike and knowing about bikes.

× And then recently I see many people, they are riding bikes to, you know, work. I can see every time.

✓ Recently, I have seen many people riding bikes to work.

Recently refers to a time period continuing up to the present, so the present perfect have seen is more appropriate here than the simple present see. This correction also removes the repeated subject they and the incomplete phrase I can see every time.