自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 先直接回答是否有自行车，再用过去时补充颜色、家人或学习骑车的经历。注意用“bike”而不是“bag”，并使用过去时，例如“was”和“spent”。避免把多个想法连成一个长句；“it has incompetent me”表达不清，可以改为“it gave me many happy memories”。

示例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a pink bike when I was in secondary school. It took me a few months to learn how to ride it, but I had a lot of fun once I got the hang of it.

建议: 观点明确，但重复了“in my country”，也有较多填充词，影响流畅度。开头可以直接说“Bikes are very popular in my country”。用“means of transport”或“form of transportation”描述交通方式，并把“不会遇到交通堵塞”表达为“you can avoid traffic jams”。补充一个具体原因即可。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. They’re convenient for short journeys, especially in busy cities, because cyclists can often avoid traffic jams. They’re also an affordable way to get around.

× when I was in the secondary school

✓ when I was in secondary school

这里的“secondary school”泛指中学阶段，不需要使用定冠词“the”。表示在校就读时，通常说“in secondary school”。

× since I'm a little girl at that time

✓ because I was a little girl at the time

“at that time”指过去，因此动词应使用过去式“was”，而不是现在时“am”。这里用“because”表达原因也更清楚。

× I've spent a long time about several months to learn how to ride it

✓ I spent a long time—about several months—learning how to ride it

这件事发生在童年，属于已经结束的过去经历，因此应使用一般过去时“spent”，而不是现在完成时“I've spent”。

× I've spent a long time about several months to learn how to ride it

✓ I spent a long time—about several months—learning how to ride it

“spend time”后面接动词时，通常使用动名词形式，即“spend time doing something”，所以应将“to learn”改为“learning”。

× in my country, BAC is a really popular um trans transportation

✓ In my country, bikes are a really popular means of transportation.

“transportation”通常是不可数名词，不能直接说“a transportation”。这里可用“a means of transportation”表达“一种交通方式”。

× it is more convenient sometimes like than the meterals and cars

✓ It is sometimes more convenient than the metro and cars.

比较级“more convenient”后应直接接“than”，不能在“than”前加“like”。此处“like”应删除。

× because it won't feel uh it won't meet any uh traffic jams

✓ because it doesn't get caught in traffic jams

这里是在说明自行车通常具有的优点，应用一般现在时，而不是表示将来的“won't”。描述交通拥堵时，“get caught in traffic jams”也比“meet traffic jams”更自然。