自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly with a clear subject and correct tense. The phrase “with Korean children” is unclear, and “it is no more transportation” does not express your meaning naturally. Explain whether you personally had a bike, then add a brief detail about who bought it or how you used it. Check subject–verb agreement and use “for them” only when referring to children in general.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. In Korea, many children have bikes, and my parents bought one for me when I was about eight. I often rode it around my neighborhood.

建议: Give your opinion once, avoid repeating “bikes,” and use the plural forms “other forms of transport” and “buses and the subway.” Explain more precisely why cycling is inconvenient for commuting, and connect your reason smoothly with a linking word such as “because” or “as a result.”

示例: I don’t think bikes are very popular for commuting in Korea. Most people rely on buses and the subway because cycling can be uncomfortable in heavy traffic and difficult over long distances. As a result, many people use bikes mainly for exercise or leisure.

× Ha had a bike because it is no more transportation for children

✓ I had a bike because it was no longer a means of transportation for children

The speaker is describing childhood, so use the past-tense verb was rather than the present-tense is. The phrase no longer a means of transportation is a natural way to express that idea.

× their parents bought for them

✓ their parents bought bikes for them

Bought needs a direct object here. Name what the parents bought, such as bikes, before adding for them.

× Most people prefer other form of transport

✓ Most people prefer other forms of transport

Other refers to multiple kinds of transport in this context, so use the plural noun forms.

× such as buses and subway

✓ such as buses and the subway

Use the before subway when referring to the public transportation system in general. Buses is plural and does not need an article here.

× cycling can be uncomfortable in commuting

✓ cycling can be uncomfortable while commuting

In is not the appropriate preposition in this phrase. Use while commuting to describe when cycling may be uncomfortable.

× because cycling can be uncomfortable in commuting so people don't use

✓ Because cycling can be uncomfortable while commuting, people don't use bikes

Do not use because and so together to connect this cause and result in one clause structure. Use because to introduce the reason, then state the result in the main clause.

× people don't use

✓ people don't use bikes

Use needs an object in this context. Add bikes to clarify what people do not use.