自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 先直接回答问题，并注意时态一致：谈童年经历时用过去时“had”。“pie”是“馅饼”，这里应为“bike”。后半句可改为“my parents bought it for me”，避免同时使用“that was”和“bought”。

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me as a birthday present, and I used to ride it around our neighborhood.

建议: 回答观点后补充一个具体原因即可。避免重复使用“Well”；“most people”前不加“of”，“choose”前不需要“are”，并保持并列结构一致，例如“drive, take the subway, or ride bikes”。注意“by subway”应改为“take the subway”。

示例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer driving or taking the subway because these options are more convenient for longer journeys.

× Yes, I have a pie when I was a child, and that was my parents bought it for me as a birthday gift.

✓ Yes, I had a pie when I was a child, and my parents bought it for me as a birthday gift.

句子描述的是“小时候”的过去经历，因此应使用一般过去时。这里的 have 应改为 had。

× Yes, I have a pie when I was a child, and that was my parents bought it for me as a birthday gift.

✓ Yes, I had a pie when I was a child, and my parents bought it for me as a birthday gift.

“that was my parents bought it”把 that was 和 my parents bought it 两种结构错误地拼在一起。删除 that was，并直接用 and 连接两个分句，句子结构会更完整、自然。

× Well, most of people are choose to like driving or by subway, not ride bikes.

✓ Well, I think bikes are not popular in my country. Most people choose to drive or take the subway rather than ride bikes.

most 后直接接可数名词复数时，应说 most people；如果使用 most of，则需要限定词，例如 most of the people。此处应改为 most people。

× Well, most of people are choose to like driving or by subway, not ride bikes.

✓ Well, I think bikes are not popular in my country. Most people choose to drive or take the subway rather than ride bikes.

一般现在时的主动句中，choose 前不需要 be 动词，因此 are choose 应改为 choose。另外，并列表达应保持结构平行：choose to drive、take the subway 和 ride bikes。可以用 rather than 连接对比的出行方式，使句子更清楚自然。