自行车— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
考生
I used to have a bag when I was a child and at the age of 6 I actually got my first bike as a present as a birthday present. And yeah, I was very happy at that moment, but also scared to just start writing. So my parents bought a special equipment for.
考官
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
考生
Actually, Russian government invest a lot in different um sports facilities to make Russians more fit and sporty. That is why, yeah, we have um it is very popular to ride bikes in our country. We have different paths um and uh they are usually situated somewhere in the forest because
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总分
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
分数: 48.0建议: Ответьте прямо на вопрос и уточните, что вы имеете в виду именно велосипед: «bag» здесь, вероятно, должно быть «bike», а «writing» — «riding». Избегайте повтора «as a present as a birthday present» и используйте неисчисляемое «some special equipment». Завершите мысль: объясните, как родители помогли вам научиться кататься. Разделите ответ на короткие, связные предложения.
示例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike as a birthday present when I was six, and I was thrilled, although I was a little nervous about riding it. My parents bought me some protective gear and helped me learn.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
分数: 42.0建议: Начните с чёткого ответа («Yes, I think they are quite popular»), затем приведите один конкретный довод или пример. Согласуйте подлежащее и сказуемое: «the Russian government invests». Не соединяйте фрагменты «That is why» и «we have» — сформулируйте мысль напрямую. Уберите слова-паразиты и закончите предложение: ответ обрывается на «because». Уточните, где проходят маршруты и почему люди там катаются.
示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Russia. The government has been investing in sports facilities, and many towns have cycling paths. Some routes run through forests, which makes them especially enjoyable in the summer.
语法
× So my parents bought a special equipment for.
✓ So my parents bought special equipment for me.
Equipment is an uncountable noun, so it does not take the article a. Say special equipment. The sentence also needs an object after for; here, me completes the phrase.
× Actually, Russian government invest a lot in different sports facilities to make Russians more fit and sporty.
✓ Actually, the Russian government invests a lot in different sports facilities to make Russians fitter and sportier.
The subject government is singular, so the present-tense verb needs the third-person singular ending -s: invests. Use fitter and sportier as the comparative forms of fit and sporty.
× Actually, Russian government invest a lot in different sports facilities to make Russians more fit and sporty.
✓ Actually, the Russian government invests a lot in different sports facilities to make Russians fitter and sportier.
Use the definite article the before Russian government when referring to the national government as a specific institution.
× That is why, yeah, we have um it is very popular to ride bikes in our country.
✓ That is why riding bikes is very popular in our country.
The original sentence joins we have with it is very popular without a clear grammatical connection. Make riding bikes the subject of the sentence to express the idea clearly. Remove fillers such as yeah and um in a polished response.
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