自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and avoid contradicting yourself: bicycles are bikes, so clarify whether you did or did not enjoy riding them. Use the natural phrase “I didn’t have a bike as a child” and say “I preferred playing outdoor games to riding a bike.” Add one specific detail, and avoid fillers and repeated corrections.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because I wasn’t very interested in cycling. I preferred playing outdoor games with my friends, such as football. I usually spent my free time at the local park instead.

建议: Give a clear general answer first, then support it with a relevant example. Replace “I have my brother, which” with “my brother is” and use “in general” or “many people” to describe the wider population. Avoid the unclear phrase “demand it bikes and cars”; explain whether people use bikes for transport or recreation.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and young adults. My brother has loved cycling since he was a child and often asked our parents for a bike. Many people also ride them because they are a convenient and affordable way to get around.

× No, I didn't have any bike in my childhood because I was not fond of bikes and cars.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike in my childhood because I was not fond of bikes and cars.

In this context, bike refers to one countable item, so use the article a rather than any. You can also say, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

× And I was more fond for fond of playing physical games, which were interesting more than this.

✓ I was more fond of playing physical games, which were more interesting to me than bikes.

In a comparison, place more before the adjective: more interesting. Use than to introduce the comparison, and name the thing being compared with the games. The phrase fond for appears to be a false start; the correct expression is fond of.

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in our country because I have my brother, which is also very fond of bikes.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in our country because I have a brother who is also very fond of bikes.

Use who, not which, in a relative clause referring to a person. A brother is a singular countable noun, so a is appropriate when introducing him.

× Uh, in the, in his childhood also he would demand it bikes and cars from parents and with respect to in general the country population, they are fond of bikes.

✓ In his childhood, he would also demand bikes and cars from his parents.

The pronoun it cannot be used before the plural nouns bikes and cars as their determiner. Remove it and use the nouns directly after demand. His parents makes clear whose parents are meant.

× Uh, in the, in his childhood also he would demand it bikes and cars from parents and with respect to in general the country population, they are fond of bikes.

✓ In general, people in the country are fond of bikes.

With respect to does not fit together with in general in this sentence. Use In general as a sentence opener, followed by the main clause. People in the country also avoids the awkward phrase the country population.