自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then add a brief detail about when or where you rode your bike. Avoid the redundant phrase “bought me ... for me,” remove repeated words and fillers, and use “rode” rather than “wrote.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My father gave me my first one for my eighth birthday, and I rode it around the neighborhood with my friends most afternoons. It made me feel independent.

建议: Give a clear answer about how popular bikes are, then explain why. Use the more natural comparison “not as popular as they are in many European countries,” and specify the infrastructure that is lacking, such as protected bike lanes. Avoid repeated fillers and the unclear phrase “special way for people who want bike.”

示例: Bikes are not as popular in my country as they are in many European countries. One reason is that there are few protected bike lanes, so cycling on busy roads can feel dangerous. If the government built safer routes, I think more people would choose to cycle.

× My father bought me my first bicycle for me when I was 8 as a birthday present.

✓ My father bought me my first bicycle when I was 8 as a birthday present.

The indirect object me is repeated: bought me already means bought it for me. Remove for me to avoid the redundant pronoun.

× I wrote it with my friends every afternoon.

✓ I rode it with my friends every afternoon.

The intended activity is riding a bicycle. The past tense of ride is rode; wrote is the past tense of write and has a different meaning.

× I think it's not as popular as European countries.

✓ I think bikes are not as popular in my country as they are in European countries.

The original compares bikes with countries, which are not comparable. Compare bikes in your country with bikes in European countries.

× I think government really didn't provide any special way for people who want bike, bicycle.

✓ I think the government doesn't provide any special facilities for people who want to ride a bike.

Use the before government when referring to the government of your country. Bike is a singular countable noun and needs an article, but the clearer construction here is want to ride a bike. The present tense doesn't provide suits a general statement about current conditions.

× The avenue and highways are really dangerous for riding.

✓ The avenues and highways are really dangerous for riding.

Avenues and highways refers to multiple roads, so both nouns should be plural. Use avenues to match the plural noun highways.