自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 先直接回答，再用一两句补充自行车的来源和你当时的感受。注意冠词和表达：应说“a bike”和“for my fifth birthday”；“daft at riding bikes”不自然，可改为“really enjoyed riding it”或“was good at riding it”。描述过去的经历时使用过去时，例如“learned to ride”，并避免重复表达“礼物”。

示例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a bike for my fifth birthday, and I absolutely loved it. I learned to ride it without much help from them, so I felt quite proud.

建议: 回答有明确观点，也提供了过去与现在的对比；可以保留这个具体角度，但要修正语法并让表达更自然。“a country that a full of”应改为“a country full of”；描述十年前的普遍情况时用过去时，并避免“All people”这种过于绝对的说法。可以用“while”连接过去和现在。

示例: Yes, bikes are still popular in China, although they are less common than they used to be. Around ten years ago, many people commuted by bicycle or motorcycle. These days, more people drive cars, especially in larger cities.

× I had bike when I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

bike 是可数名词单数，前面需要加不定冠词 a。

× It was a gift from my parents as my five years old birthday gift.

✓ It was a gift from my parents for my fifth birthday.

原句中的 “my five years old birthday gift” 结构不正确。表示“我五岁生日”时应说 “my fifth birthday”；表示礼物是为某个生日准备的，可用介词 for。

× Even without teaching from my parents I can learn it.

✓ Even without my parents teaching me, I could learn to ride it.

这段话讲的是童年时的经历，因此用 could 与过去语境保持一致。表示“学会骑车”时，说 learn to ride it 比 learn it 更清楚。

× You may think of a country that a full of bikes on the streets.

✓ You may think of a country that is full of bikes on the streets.

关系从句 that a full of bikes 缺少谓语动词。描述“充满……”时需要使用 be full of，因此应补上 is。

× Especially 10 years ago all people on the streets are riding bikes and motorcycles.

✓ Especially 10 years ago, all people on the streets were riding bikes and motorcycles.

10 years ago 表示过去的时间，描述当时正在发生的动作应使用过去进行时 were riding，而不是现在进行时 are riding。