自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then explain why you got the bike. Use the past tense consistently: “I had just learned,” “my parents gave me.” Avoid restarting phrases, and finish your answer with a clear detail about how you used or felt about the bike.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got my first one when I was seven, shortly after I learned how to ride. My parents bought it so I could cycle to school, and I loved using it.

建议: Give a clear present-tense answer and support it with a specific example. Correct “bag” to “bike” if that is what you meant, use “bikes” or “a bike,” and keep verb tenses consistent. Complete your final idea—for example, explain that you raced to see who would arrive first.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. Many of my friends used to cycle to school. After class, we sometimes raced each other to see who could get home first.

× So when I at that time I just learned how to ride a bike

✓ At that time, I had just learned how to ride a bike.

The original clause is missing a verb after I and repeats the time reference with both when and at that time. Use a complete clause with the past perfect had just learned to show the learning happened before the next past event.

× my parents gives me give g- give me a first bike for me to go to school

✓ My parents gave me my first bike so I could go to school.

The event happened when you were a child, so use the past-tense verb gave rather than the present-tense gives. The repeated forms appear to be speech disfluencies; use one complete verb phrase. Could is appropriate for the purpose in this past context.

× my parents gives me give g- give me a first bike for me to go to school

✓ My parents gave me my first bike so I could go to school.

A first bike is not the natural determiner here because you are referring to the bike that belonged to you. Use my first bike.

× Everyone had a bag when they are a child.

✓ Everyone had a bag when they were a child.

The sentence describes childhood in the past, so the verb in the when-clause should also be in the past: were, not are. This correction addresses tense only; bag may be a transcription or word-choice issue, which is outside the listed grammar types.

× Everyone had a bag when they are a child.

✓ Everyone had a bag when they were children.

They refers to everyone in this sentence, so children is the natural plural form after they. The original pairs plural they with singular a child.

× After school, we sometimes make made a competition to ride bike to compare with the first

✓ After school, we sometimes have competitions to ride bikes and see who is fastest.

The singular countable noun bike needs a determiner, or it can be made plural as bikes when speaking generally. Competitions is plural here because the sentence describes something that happens sometimes. The original phrase also contains a repeated verb form, so the correction uses one clear verb phrase.