自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly in one clear sentence, then add a relevant personal detail. The repeated phrasing (“I did actually have, I did own”) and fillers (“actually,” “you know,” “right?”) make the response hesitant. The discussion of how people learn to ride is interesting but drifts away from whether you had a bike. Use natural phrasing such as “learn to ride,” and avoid unclear expressions like “knowledge of skill.”

示例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was a child and often rode it around my neighborhood. Learning to balance was difficult at first, but I soon got the hang of it.

建议: You give a clear opinion and relevant reasons, including the cold climate and limited cycling infrastructure. Improve fluency by removing repeated fillers and phrases such as “actually,” “you know,” and “not really popular.” Connect your reasons smoothly, and use the more natural comparison “compared with countries such as the Netherlands.”

示例: I’d say bikes aren’t very popular in my country compared with places like the Netherlands. The main reason is that it’s too cold to cycle comfortably for much of the year. Also, there aren’t many dedicated bike lanes, so people often choose other forms of transport.

× It's just seems to be knowledge of skill.

✓ It just seems to be a learned skill.

The sentence uses two finite verbs, is and seems, in the same clause. Remove is and use It just seems. I also changed knowledge of skill to a learned skill for a more natural expression.

× Actually I don't really think bikes are as popular in my country as opposed to some, you know, European countries like the Netherlands and such.

✓ Actually, I don't really think bikes are as popular in my country as they are in some European countries, like the Netherlands.

The as...as comparison needs a parallel comparison: bikes are as popular in one place as they are in another. As opposed to does not correctly complete this comparison. Use as they are in some European countries.

× Mostly because of how cold my country is.

✓ This is mostly because of how cold my country is.

As a standalone sentence, this is a fragment because it gives a reason without stating what that reason explains. Add This is to make it a complete sentence.

× ...so bikes are used but it's not really popular.

✓ ...so bikes are used, but they are not really popular.

The pronoun it does not agree in number with bikes, which is plural. Use they to refer to bikes. Alternatively, name the activity: ...but cycling is not very popular.