自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答切题，也补充了年龄、颜色和喜欢它的原因。注意避免重复（“red small small red”），并使用自然的语序，如“a small red bike”。句末“to handle and learning to ride”结构不平行，可改为“to handle and learn to ride”。

示例: Yes, I did. When I was about six, my mother bought me a small red bike. I loved it because it was the perfect size for me and made learning to ride much easier.

建议: 回答的大意似乎是自行车在当地很受欢迎，但有几处表达影响理解。“Where I think”可删去；注意区分“bikes”和“banks”。最后关于共享单车的部分不够清楚，可以用“bike-sharing services have made cycling more convenient”表达。建议按“观点—原因—补充细节”的顺序作答，并使用逗号或连接词组织句子。

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. They’re affordable and convenient for short trips. In recent years, bike-sharing services have made it even easier for people to get around.

× Yes I did, when I was about 6 my mother bought me a red small small red bike and I loved it because it was a perfect size for me to handle and learning to ride.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was about six, my mother bought me a small red bike, and I loved it because it was the perfect size for me to handle and learn to ride.

英语中多个形容词通常按一定顺序排列；表示大小的 small 一般放在表示颜色的 red 前面，因此应说 “a small red bike”。原句中的 “small small red” 还有重复，应删去多余的词。

× Yes I did, when I was about 6 my mother bought me a red small small red bike and I loved it because it was a perfect size for me to handle and learning to ride.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was about six, my mother bought me a small red bike, and I loved it because it was the perfect size for me to handle and learn to ride.

这里的 “handle” 和 “learn” 并列，都受前面的不定式标记 to 支配，因此应使用动词原形：“to handle and learn”。“learning” 与前面的结构不平行。可以通过检查并列动词是否使用相同形式来避免这类错误。

× Where I think banks are quite popular in my city in my country because the bikes are cheap and good for trips and recently bike sharing's wives have made them.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in my city and in my country because they are cheap and good for trips. Recently, bike-sharing services have made them more popular.

句首的 “Where” 表示地点，不能这样直接引出 “I think” 这一主句，会造成句子结构不完整或不自然；这里应删去。此外，原句末尾的表达无法构成清楚完整的意思。可将意思整理为 “Recently, bike-sharing services have made them more popular”（最近，共享单车服务让它们更受欢迎）。