自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then give one or two clear reasons. Avoid repeating the same idea, and use natural phrases such as “get to school” and “stay healthy.” Correct the tense and grammar: use “my parents hoped I could,” “kept me healthy,” and “made the journey quicker.” The answer is difficult to follow because two sentences run together.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was seven. My parents hoped I would ride it to school because it was quite close to our home. It was a convenient way to get there, and cycling helped me stay active.

建议: You give a direct answer and relevant reasons, such as affordability and ease of parking. Improve accuracy by saying “many areas have narrow streets” (not “a narrow streets”) and “to the market” or “to work.” “Carts” is an unusual comparison here; explain why bicycles suit narrow streets, or compare them with cars. Avoid repeating or correcting a word mid-sentence.

示例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in areas with narrow streets. They are often more practical than cars for short trips to the market or work because they are inexpensive and easy to park.

× My parents hope I can use alternative way to go to the school, since the school was not far away from my home.

✓ My parents hoped I could use an alternative way to get to school, since the school was not far away from my home.

The answer describes a past situation, so hope should be changed to hoped. Could is the past form of can in this reported thought. Use an before the singular countable noun way, and normally omit the before school when referring to school as an institution.

× Riding a bike to the school every day keep me health

✓ Riding a bike to school every day kept me healthy.

Healthy is the adjective needed after keep me; health is a noun. Since the answer refers to a childhood experience, kept is also appropriate for the past. Use go to school without the when referring to school as an institution.

× Riding a bike to the school every day keep me health

✓ Riding a bike to school every day kept me healthy.

The subject is the singular gerund phrase Riding a bike to school every day, so it requires a singular verb. In this past account, use kept. A gerund phrase used as the subject takes a singular verb.

× Riding a bike to the school every day helped me to keep a balance, also make the journey quicker.

✓ Riding a bike to school every day helped me keep my balance and also made the journey quicker.

The answer describes a past experience, so make should be changed to made to match helped. Join the two coordinated actions with and. My balance is the natural possessive expression here.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many areas have a narrow streets and lanes, so bicycles are more comforta- convenient than carts.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many areas have narrow streets and lanes, so bicycles are more convenient than carts.

Streets and lanes is plural, so it cannot be preceded by the singular article a. Remove a. Convenient is the completed word in the self-correction; the incomplete comforta- is a speech disfluency, not a grammar form.

× People often use them for short trips to market or work, since they are cheap, fast, and easy to park.

✓ People often use them for short trips to the market or to work, since they are cheap, fast, and easy to park.

Use the before market when referring to the usual local market. To work does not take an article because work is used here to mean the activity or destination of employment.