自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Trả lời trực tiếp và đưa ra chi tiết cụ thể về chiếc xe đạp, nhưng cần dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán: đổi “I have” thành “I had” và “I love” thành “I loved”. Cụm “a great moment that still bear in mind” chưa tự nhiên; có thể nói “a memory I still cherish” hoặc “a moment I still remember fondly”. Hãy thêm từ nối như “and” hoặc “because” để liên kết ý.

示例: Yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child. I loved riding it around my neighbourhood in the afternoons, and it’s a happy memory I still cherish.

建议: Nêu quan điểm rõ ràng, nhưng cần dùng danh từ số nhiều hoặc mạo từ đúng: “bikes”, “motorbikes” và “a bicycle”. Câu cuối chưa hoàn chỉnh và cách diễn đạt “the street system ... is too narrow and a lot of challenges” chưa tự nhiên; hãy nói đường phố chật hẹp và việc đi xe đạp gặp nhiều khó khăn. Giảm các từ đệm “uh/umm” và dùng từ nối như “because” để giải thích lý do.

示例: No, I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorbikes because they’re faster and more convenient. Also, many streets are narrow and busy, which can make cycling challenging.

× Uh, yes, of course I have a pink bike when I was younger.

✓ Uh, yes, of course I had a pink bike when I was younger.

The sentence refers to a period in the past, indicated by when I was younger, so use the past-tense form had rather than have.

× I love riding a bike around my house and on the roads in the afternoon.

✓ I loved riding a bike around my house and on the roads in the afternoon.

The student is describing a childhood habit, so the past-tense verb loved is more consistent with the past context.

× It's such a great moment that still bear in mind until now.

✓ It's such a great memory that I still remember to this day.

The relative clause is missing a subject before the verb bear. Adding I creates a complete clause. Remember to this day also expresses the intended meaning more clearly.

× Uh, well, actually I don't think bike is popular in my country.

✓ Uh, well, actually I don't think bikes are popular in my country.

Bike is used generically to refer to bicycles as a category, so the plural form bikes is needed. The plural subject also requires are.

× People prefer to use motorbike rather than a bicycle.

✓ People prefer to use motorbikes rather than bicycles.

The sentence compares vehicles in general, so use plural nouns for both items to make the comparison grammatically parallel.

× Uh, one reason is that umm, the street system in my country is too narrow and a lot of umm, challenges.

✓ Uh, one reason is that the street system in my country is too narrow and presents a lot of challenges.

The phrase after and has no verb, so it does not form a complete clause. Adding presents gives the second part a verb and completes the sentence.