自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm và có đưa ra chi tiết về món quà của bố cũng như sở thích của mình. Tuy nhiên, có nhiều từ ngập ngừng và lặp lại như “uh”, “really really”; cấu trúc “love my riding a bike” và “in every afternoon” chưa tự nhiên. Hãy dùng câu ngắn, đúng ngữ pháp và diễn đạt sở thích bằng “I loved riding my bike”.

示例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike for my birthday, and I loved riding it around my neighbourhood every afternoon. It was one of my favourite hobbies at the time.

建议: Câu trả lời bị ngắt giữa chừng và chưa trả lời rõ ràng liệu xe đạp hiện nay có phổ biến hay không. Bạn cũng chuyển thời giữa quá khứ và hiện tại chưa nhất quán; “flying the bike” không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này (có thể nói “riding their bikes”). Hãy nêu quan điểm ngay từ đầu, sau đó giải thích bằng lý do hoặc ví dụ cụ thể, và kết thúc câu trả lời hoàn chỉnh.

示例: Yes, bikes are still popular in my country, especially among children and people who live in smaller towns. When I was in grade seven, many of my classmates rode their bikes to school because they were cheaper than motorbikes. These days, though, more adults tend to use motorbikes for longer journeys.

× I really really love my riding a bike around uh in every afternoon

✓ I really love riding a bike around every afternoon.

After love, use a gerund directly in this sentence: love riding. The possessive my is unnecessary here. You can also omit in before every afternoon.

× in every afternoon

✓ every afternoon

Do not use in before every when referring to how often something happens. Say every afternoon.

× it's only my hobbies at that time

✓ it was my only hobby at that time

The speaker describes one hobby, so the singular noun hobby is needed instead of hobbies. Place only before the noun it modifies: my only hobby.

× it's only my hobbies at that time

✓ it was my only hobby at that time

At that time refers to a past period, so use the past form was rather than the present form is.

× Well, it it was it was uh very popular in my country.

✓ Well, bikes were very popular in my country.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Use the plural noun bikes or the pronoun they.

× At that time people don't have enough money to buy the motorbike

✓ At that time, people did not have enough money to buy a motorbike.

At that time refers to the past, so use did not have rather than don't have. After did, use the base form have.

× when i was grade 7

✓ when I was in grade 7

Use the preposition in before a school grade level: in grade 7.

× people loved flying the bike go around

✓ people loved riding their bikes and going around

The original phrase does not form a clear grammatical structure: go cannot follow the phrase the bike in this way. Use parallel gerund phrases, riding their bikes and going around.

× and they enjoy that it's so much

✓ and they enjoyed it so much

The student is describing what people did in the past, so use enjoyed instead of enjoy.

× and they enjoy that it's so much

✓ and they enjoyed it so much

The phrase that it's so much does not complete the meaning of enjoy. Use the object pronoun it and place so much after the verb phrase: enjoyed it so much.