自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly, then give one relevant reason or detail. Avoid changing the topic to toys unless you clearly connect them to why you did not have a bike. Use the past simple correctly: “I didn’t have” and “I didn’t play.” Say “in the countryside” rather than “in a village side,” and use “toys made by my mother” rather than “toys with which is made.”

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because I grew up in a small village. Instead, I usually played with handmade toys that my mother made for me.

建议: Give a clear answer and support it with a concise explanation. Reduce fillers and repetition, and correct the phrasing: say “bikes are very popular,” “not everyone can afford a private car,” “public transport can be inconvenient,” and “some public transport drivers are rude.” Be careful not to imply that all drivers are rude.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in rural areas. Not everyone can afford a car, and public transport can be inconvenient, so many people use bikes for short trips.

× No, when I was a child I didn't have I didn't had any bike because I grew up in a village side.

✓ No, when I was a child, I didn't have a bike because I grew up in a village.

After did or didn't, use the base form of the verb. Therefore, use didn't have, not didn't had. The repeated phrase is a false start, and in a village is the natural way to express the location.

× So in my childhood I didn't played any toys.

✓ So, in my childhood, I didn't play with any toys.

After didn't, use the base form play, not the past-tense form played.

× So in my childhood I didn't played any toys.

✓ So, in my childhood, I didn't play with any toys.

The usual expression is play with toys, so the preposition with is needed between play and toys.

× I played handmade toys with which is made made by my mom.

✓ I played with handmade toys that were made by my mom.

Use play with when referring to toys someone uses during play. The original also repeats made; the correction removes the repetition.

× I played handmade toys with which is made made by my mom.

✓ I played with handmade toys that were made by my mom.

The relative clause refers to plural toys, so use were rather than is. Were made also fits the past-time context of the answer.

× Yes, these days bikes are most popular in our country, especially in the countryside, because, you know, these days, uh, every people can't afford private car and uh, public vehicles are so irritating and the public vehicles drivers are such a rude.

✓ Yes, these days bikes are very popular in our country, especially in the countryside, because not everyone can afford a private car, and public vehicles are so irritating and their drivers are so rude.

Every is used with a singular countable noun, as in every person, not every people. Not everyone is a natural way to express the intended meaning that some people cannot afford a car.

× Yes, these days bikes are most popular in our country, especially in the countryside, because, you know, these days, uh, every people can't afford private car and uh, public vehicles are so irritating and the public vehicles drivers are such a rude.

✓ Yes, these days bikes are very popular in our country, especially in the countryside, because not everyone can afford a private car, and public vehicles are so irritating and their drivers are so rude.

Private car is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a private car when referring to one car in general.

× Yes, these days bikes are most popular in our country, especially in the countryside, because, you know, these days, uh, every people can't afford private car and uh, public vehicles are so irritating and the public vehicles drivers are such a rude.

✓ Yes, these days bikes are very popular in our country, especially in the countryside, because not everyone can afford a private car, and public vehicles are so irritating and their drivers are so rude.

Rude is an adjective, and such a cannot directly modify an adjective without a noun. Use so rude or very rude.