自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 질문에 직접 답한 점과 아버지와 관련된 구체적인 경험을 덧붙인 점이 좋습니다. 다만 “Yes, I did”와 “I did have a bike”는 의미가 반복되므로 하나만 사용하세요. “a core memory for me and my dad”는 다소 어색하니, 그 경험이 아버지와의 소중한 추억이라고 표현하면 자연스럽습니다. 말할 때 “umm” 같은 군더더기를 줄여 보세요.

示例: Yes, I did. My dad taught me how to ride it when I was young, so learning to ride a bike is a special memory I share with him.

建议: 자전거가 인기 있는 이유로 학생과 직장인의 이용을 든 점은 적절합니다. “many of my friends”처럼 자연스럽게 말하고, 일반적인 자전거를 뜻할 때는 “ride bikes” 또는 “use bikes”라고 복수형을 사용하세요. “use bike as their transportation”은 “use bikes to get around”처럼 간결하게 바꿀 수 있습니다. 마지막에 앞의 내용을 반복하기보다 통학이나 출퇴근 같은 구체적인 용도를 덧붙여 보세요.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many of my friends ride them, and students and workers often use bikes to get to school or work, especially for short journeys.

× Yes, many of my f- friends ride a bike and many students and workers use bike as their transportation so I think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, many of my friends ride a bike, and many students and workers use bikes as their transportation, so I think bikes are popular in my country.

When referring to bikes in general, use the plural form bikes. The phrase use bike is incorrect because a singular countable noun needs an article, or it can be changed to the plural bikes. Here, bikes is the natural choice because the sentence refers to bikes generally.