自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm và có thêm chi tiết về món quà, nhưng cần dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán: “had” thay cho “have” và “was studying” hoặc “started primary school” thay cho “study”. Câu hiện tại nối nhiều ý bằng dấu phẩy, nên hãy tách câu và dùng từ tự nhiên hơn như “grandfather” hoặc “grandparents”.

示例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was six. My grandfather bought it for me when I started primary school, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood.

建议: Bạn đã nêu quan điểm trực tiếp, nhưng phần giải thích còn khó hiểu do dùng sai hoặc lặp từ (ví dụ: “pie”, “lie”, “for for example”). Hãy dùng danh từ số nhiều “pupils” và diễn đạt rõ ai đi xe đạp, họ dùng xe để làm gì. Có thể đưa một ví dụ cụ thể, chẳng hạn học sinh đạp xe đến trường hoặc người dân đạp xe để tập thể dục.

示例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many students ride them to school, while adults often cycle for exercise. For example, it is common to see people cycling in the park in the late afternoon.

× Yes, I have a bicycle when I was six years old, my grandparent said that he could buy me a bicycle when I study in primary school.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was six years old. My grandparent said that he could buy me a bicycle when I studied in primary school.

The question refers to the past, so use the past-tense form had instead of have. Because the grandparent’s statement is also reported in a past-tense context, use studied instead of study.

× Pupil usually use pie for exercise for for example also like to lie to bike like to buy a bicycle in the afternoon.

✓ Pupils usually use pie for exercise. For example, they also like to lie to bike and like to buy a bicycle in the afternoon.

Pupil is a singular countable noun, but the sentence describes people in general and uses the plural verb use. Make the subject plural: pupils. The word pie and the phrase lie to bike appear to be transcription or word-choice issues, so they have not been changed.

× Pupil usually use pie for exercise for for example also like to lie to bike like to buy a bicycle in the afternoon.

✓ Pupils usually use pie for exercise. For example, they also like to lie to bike and like to buy a bicycle in the afternoon.

The original sentence combines several ideas without clear punctuation or a complete structure, and repeats for. Separate the example into a new sentence, add the subject they, and connect the two activities with and. Avoid repeating words such as for.