自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 先直接回答过去是否有自行车，并统一使用过去时：用“had”代替“have”，“was”代替“were”，“thought”代替“think”。“brought me love my first bike”和“learn this Hobbit”表达不清楚；可以说母亲在暑假给你买了第一辆自行车，并鼓励你学习骑车。补充一两句具体感受或学习经历即可。

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought me my first one during the summer holidays and encouraged me to learn how to ride it. I was nervous at first, but I soon became more confident.

建议: 开头观点明确，但“I'm in the country”容易被理解为你身处乡村，而不是在谈你的国家；请直接说“in my country”。改进语法，例如用“many people use motorcycles or drive cars”，以及“it can be dangerous to ride a bicycle on the road”。还可以说明危险的原因，并指出自行车是否在公园或乡村地区更常见。

示例: Bikes aren’t very popular in my country, especially in busy cities. Many people prefer motorcycles or cars because they’re more convenient for long journeys. Also, cycling on crowded roads can be dangerous. However, bikes are more common in parks and quieter areas.

× I have a bike, when I were child

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

这段话描述的是童年时期的经历，应使用过去时。表示“有”要用 had；主语是 I 时，be 动词的过去式应为 was，而不是 were。

× when I were child

✓ when I was a child

child 是单数可数名词，前面通常需要冠词 a。可以记住结构：be 动词 + a/an + 单数身份或称谓名词，例如 a child。

× my mother brought me love my first bike

✓ My mother brought me my first bike.

brought me 后面可以直接接所带来的东西，即 brought me my first bike。原句中的 love 插入后破坏了句子结构；如果它不是有意表达的内容，应删去。

× in the summer vacation

✓ during the summer vacation

表达“在暑假期间”时，during 比 in 更适合搭配 vacation。可以记住 during + 一段时间或某个时期。

× she think I have to learn this Hobbit

✓ She thought I had to learn this hobby.

这句话描述过去发生的想法，应把 think 改为过去式 thought；过去语境中，“不得不”也应使用 had to。这里将 Hobbit 改为 hobby 是对疑似拼写错误的修正，并非语法规则本身。

× there are many people use motorcycle or drive the car

✓ There are many people who use motorcycles or drive cars.

many people 后直接接 use，缺少连接两部分的关系代词。可以在 people 后加 who，形成 who use motorcycles。

× use motorcycle or drive the car

✓ use motorcycles or drive cars

这里泛指人们使用的交通工具，应使用复数 motorcycles 和 cars，而不是单数名词。

× If you ride bicycle on the road

✓ If you ride a bicycle on the road

bicycle 是单数可数名词，泛指一辆自行车时，前面需要加不定冠词 a。

× you will be very dangerous

✓ it can be very dangerous for you

dangerous 描述的是危险的事物或情况，而不是“你”这个人。可用 it 指代“骑车这件事”，并用 for you 表示“对你来说”。