自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: You answer directly and tell a clear, personal story with relevant details. Improve grammatical accuracy by saying “while I pedaled” rather than “while pedal,” and reduce repetition of “bike.” You could also use a linking phrase such as “Eventually” to make the sequence smoother.

示例: Yes, I did. My mom bought me one for my third birthday, and she would hold the back of it while I pedaled and practised balancing. Eventually, she let go, and I was able to ride on my own.

建议: Your answer gives a clear opinion and a relevant reason, but it is repetitive and contains several awkward phrases. Replace “there are only a niche group” with “only a small, dedicated group,” and say “commute to work” instead of “ride a bike to their work.” Avoid repeating “I wouldn’t say,” and clarify that the government is adding bike lanes to existing roads.

示例: Bikes are somewhat popular in my country, although cycling is not yet a common way to commute. Most people still travel by car or public transport, but a growing number of people cycle for exercise. The government is adding bike lanes to existing roads, which should make cycling safer and more appealing.

× My mom bought me a bike for my third birthday and she used to hold the back of my bike while pedal and try to balance myself.

✓ My mom bought me a bike for my third birthday, and she used to hold the back of my bike while I pedaled and tried to balance myself.

The clause after while needs an explicit subject because the person pedaling and trying to balance is the student, not the mother. Add I before the verbs to make the subject clear.

× My mom bought me a bike for my third birthday and she used to hold the back of my bike while pedal and try to balance myself.

✓ My mom bought me a bike for my third birthday, and she used to hold the back of my bike while I pedaled and tried to balance myself.

The student is describing a past experience, so the verbs in this clause should be in the past tense: pedaled and tried. Use the same tense for both coordinated verbs.

× I think bikes are moderately popular in my country, but I wouldn't say it is very popular because there are only a niche group of people who like to ride a bike but I wouldn't say everyone would ride a bike to their work.

✓ I think bikes are moderately popular in my country, but I wouldn't say they are very popular because there is only a niche group of people who like to ride a bike. However, I wouldn't say everyone would ride a bike to work.

The pronoun it does not agree with the plural noun bikes. Use they and the plural verb are when referring to bikes. If you mean cycling as an activity, you could instead say it is not very popular.

× I think bikes are moderately popular in my country, but I wouldn't say it is very popular because there are only a niche group of people who like to ride a bike but I wouldn't say everyone would ride a bike to their work.

✓ I think bikes are moderately popular in my country, but I wouldn't say they are very popular because there is only a niche group of people who like to ride a bike. However, I wouldn't say everyone would ride a bike to work.

The noun phrase after there is a niche group, which is singular. Use there is, not there are, with a singular noun phrase.

× But government is helping us by adding bike lanes or to normal roads to support uh the bike community better so there are more bikers in the country.

✓ But the government is helping us by adding bike lanes to regular roads to better support the biking community, so there are more bikers in the country.

Or incorrectly connects the phrases adding bike lanes and to normal roads. Use to instead to show where the bike lanes are being added. Avoid adding or unless you are presenting an alternative.

× But government is helping us by adding bike lanes or to normal roads to support uh the bike community better so there are more bikers in the country.

✓ But the government is helping us by adding bike lanes to regular roads to better support the biking community, so there are more bikers in the country.

The speaker is referring to the government of their country, a specific government, so the definite article the is needed before government.