自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then add one or two details about the bike or how you used it. Break up the long sentence to make it easier to follow. Use “stop me from riding it,” not “stop me for riding it,” and avoid repeating the idea of having injuries and hurting your knees.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I loved riding it around my neighbourhood. I fell off a couple of times and scraped my knees, but that never stopped me from cycling.

建议: State clearly whether bikes are popular now, and support your opinion with a specific reason or comparison. Replace “in the past years” and “in recent days” with natural phrases such as “in the past” and “these days.” Check grammar: say “I don’t see many children riding bikes,” not “I don’t see many children plays in a bikes.” Avoid restarting your answer; use “I mean” only if you need to clarify.

示例: Bikes used to be more popular among children in my country, but I don’t see as many young people cycling these days. I think this is partly because many children spend more time using phones and playing video games. However, bikes are still common for commuting in some areas.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I loved riding it and even sometimes I had injuries and hurt my knees once, but those accidents didn't stop me for riding it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I loved riding it. Sometimes I even had injuries and hurt my knees, but those accidents didn't stop me from riding it.

Even should come before the phrase it emphasizes. In this sentence, placing it before had injuries makes the intended emphasis clearer. Put sometimes at the beginning of its clause, followed by the subject and verb.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I loved riding it and even sometimes I had injuries and hurt my knees once, but those accidents didn't stop me for riding it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I loved riding it. Sometimes I even had injuries and hurt my knees, but those accidents didn't stop me from riding it.

The correct pattern is stop someone from doing something, not stop someone for doing something. Use from before the -ing form of the verb.

× In the past years they were popular, but in recent days I don't see a few.

✓ In the past, they were popular, but these days I don't see many.

A few usually means a small number and is not appropriate in this negative statement. Use many to say that you do not see a large number of bikes or children. Include the noun if the referent is not clear from context.

× I'm sorry, I don't see many children plays in a bikes and I think that that is because of the technology that kind came up.

✓ I'm sorry, I don't see many children riding bikes, and I think that's because of the technology that has emerged.

Children is plural, so it cannot be followed by plays. In the corrected sentence, riding describes what the children are doing. With a plural subject such as children, use play rather than plays if you choose to use play.

× I'm sorry, I don't see many children plays in a bikes and I think that that is because of the technology that kind came up.

✓ I'm sorry, I don't see many children riding bikes, and I think that's because of the technology that has emerged.

The phrase in a bikes uses an unsuitable preposition for the intended activity. The natural expression here is ride bikes, which does not require a preposition before bikes.

× I'm sorry, I don't see many children plays in a bikes and I think that that is because of the technology that kind came up.

✓ I'm sorry, I don't see many children riding bikes, and I think that's because of the technology that has emerged.

Do not use the singular article a before the plural noun bikes. Use bikes without an article when speaking about bikes in general.

× I'm sorry, I don't see many children plays in a bikes and I think that that is because of the technology that kind came up.

✓ I'm sorry, I don't see many children riding bikes, and I think that's because of the technology that has emerged.

The phrase that kind came up does not form a clear grammatical clause in this context. Use a complete relative clause such as technology that has emerged. This makes the connection between technology and its arrival clear.