自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly without repeating yourself, and use the natural term “training wheels” instead of “additional legs” or “additional wheels.” Explain that they helped you learn to ride, and finish your sentence clearly. Use past tense consistently, for example, “they helped me because I couldn’t balance yet.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad bought me one because I loved watching other children ride theirs. It had training wheels at first, which helped me balance while I was learning.

建议: Give a clear answer about how popular bikes are in your country, then support it with a specific reason or comparison. Avoid repeating “among” and say “compared with the Netherlands.” Clarify whether “they” refers to bikes, and complete your final idea, such as explaining that bikes are cheaper or more environmentally friendly.

示例: Bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and teenagers. However, compared with the Netherlands, fewer adults use them as their main form of transport. Many people prefer cars, but I think bikes are a better option for short journeys because they are cheaper and produce no emissions.

× So at at first it had additional legs, additional wheels, so it can support me because I didn't.

✓ So at first it had additional wheels to support me because I couldn't ride on my own.

The speaker is describing a past event, so can should be changed to could. The phrase because I didn't is also incomplete because it does not say what the speaker did not do. Complete the clause with the intended action, such as couldn't ride on my own.

× Umm, yes, bikes are popular, especially among the kids among the teenagers.

✓ Umm, yes, bikes are popular, especially among kids and teenagers.

The repeated among does not correctly connect the two groups. Use and to join kids and teenagers in one list.

× But comparing to the Netherlands, I can say that it is the prevalent type of vehicle.

✓ But compared with the Netherlands, I can say that bikes are a prevalent type of vehicle.

The opening phrase comparing to the Netherlands has no clear subject doing the comparison, so it creates a dangling construction. Use compared with to make the comparison phrase grammatical. Bikes also makes the reference clear instead of the unclear pronoun it.

× Most people prefer to use the cars, but myself I think the bikes are better because they are more.

✓ Most people prefer to use cars, but I think bikes are better because they are more convenient.

When referring to cars and bikes in general, do not use the definite article the. Use the plural nouns without an article. The corrected ending supplies an adjective after more to complete the comparison; choose an adjective that expresses your intended meaning.

× Most people prefer to use the cars, but myself I think the bikes are better because they are more.

✓ Most people prefer to use cars, but I think bikes are better because they are more convenient.

Myself is a reflexive pronoun and cannot normally replace I as the subject of this clause. Use I think. Reflexive pronouns are used when the subject and object refer to the same person, or for emphasis in an appropriate construction.

× Most people prefer to use the cars, but myself I think the bikes are better because they are more.

✓ Most people prefer to use cars, but I think bikes are better because they are more convenient.

More needs to modify an adjective or adverb, or be followed by a clear comparison. The phrase they are more is unfinished. Add the intended quality, such as convenient.