自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then add one clear detail about who gave you the bike or how you felt riding it. Avoid repeating “birthday,” and use “it” for a singular bike. The natural phrase is “when I rode it,” not “when I wrote it”; use the past tense consistently, such as “I really liked it.”

示例: Yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. My grandpa gave it to me for my birthday, and I rode it almost every day. I loved exploring the neighborhood on it.

建议: Use “bicycles are popular” rather than “the bike is famous,” and explain the reason with correct grammar: “cars are expensive, so many adults use bikes to commute.” Replace unclear phrases such as “bike bags” and “marvelous to drive” with relevant expressions like “bicycles are convenient” or “a practical way to get around.”

示例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. Since cars can be expensive to buy and maintain, many people use bikes to commute to work or run errands. They’re also a convenient way to avoid traffic.

× Then I used to ride them every day and when I wrote it, I felt very absorbed in a process and I really like it too.

✓ Then I used to ride it every day and when I wrote it, I felt very absorbed in a process and I really like it too.

The pronoun them is plural, but it refers to the singular noun bike. Use it to refer to one bike.

× Then I used to ride them every day and when I wrote it, I felt very absorbed in a process and I really like it too.

✓ Then I used to ride it every day and when I rode it, I felt very absorbed in the process, and I really liked it too.

The student is describing a childhood experience, so the verbs should stay in the past tense. Use rode rather than wrote for the past tense of ride, and liked rather than like. The phrase the process refers to the specific experience of riding.

× Yes, I think the bike is very famous in my country because there is personal cars very expensive so many adults also uses bikes to commute the work or the somewhere.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because personal cars are very expensive, so many adults also use bikes to commute to work or go somewhere.

The phrase there is does not fit this sentence: the intended meaning is that personal cars are expensive, not that cars exist. Use personal cars are very expensive. Also, use the plural bikes when speaking generally.

× Yes, I think the bike is very famous in my country because there is personal cars very expensive so many adults also uses bikes to commute the work or the somewhere.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because personal cars are very expensive, so many adults also use bikes to commute to work or go somewhere.

The subject many adults is plural, so the verb must be use, not uses. Use a plural verb with a plural subject.

× Yes, I think the bike is very famous in my country because there is personal cars very expensive so many adults also uses bikes to commute the work or the somewhere.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because personal cars are very expensive, so many adults also use bikes to commute to work or go somewhere.

The correct expression is commute to work; the preposition to is needed before work. Somewhere does not take the preposition to in this construction, so say go somewhere.

× Yes, I think the bike is very famous in my country because there is personal cars very expensive so many adults also uses bikes to commute the work or the somewhere.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because personal cars are very expensive, so many adults also use bikes to commute to work or go somewhere.

Do not use the before work in the general expression commute to work, or before somewhere. Somewhere is an indefinite adverb and does not take an article.