自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 先直接回答自己小时候有没有自行车，再补充是谁买的或一个相关回忆。注意使用过去时：说“when I was a child”和“I got/received a bike”，不要说“I have processed my own bike”。删去重复和犹豫表达，并用“because”或“and”自然连接细节。

示例: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a bike when I was about seven, and I used to ride it around our neighborhood after school. I still remember how excited I was when I got it.

建议: 开头直接回答“自行车在中国是否流行”，并用一两个清楚的理由展开。注意“自行车”是“bikes”，不是“buys”；“大力推行低碳政策”可表达为“promoting low-carbon transport”。避免重复使用“nature”，并补全“保护环境”的表达，例如“protect the environment”。

示例: Yes, bikes are becoming more popular in China. The government is promoting low-carbon transport, and many people use bikes for short trips because they are convenient and environmentally friendly. Bike-sharing services have also made cycling more accessible.

× When I was child

✓ When I was a child

child 是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词。这里应加不定冠词 a。

× I have processed my own bike from my mother, bought from her

✓ I got my own bike from my mother; she bought it for me.

这句话描述的是童年时发生的事情，应使用一般过去时。现在完成时 have processed 不适合这里的过去时间语境；可用 got 或 received 表示“得到”。

× and this is the I I still remember

✓ And this is what I still remember.

原句中的 the I 不能构成正确的名词短语，句子结构不完整。这里需要用 what 引导名词性从句，表示“我仍然记得的事情”。

× nature is become more and more important

✓ Nature is becoming more and more important.

be 动词 is 后面不能直接接动词原形 become。描述正在发生的变化时，应使用“be + 现在分词”的结构，因此改为 is becoming。

× everyone should have the awareness to protect

✓ Everyone should have the awareness to protect it.

这里的 protect 指保护自然或环境，是及物动词，后面需要有宾语。可用代词 it 指代前文的 nature，避免宾语缺失。