自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer responds directly and includes a personal memory, but keep the verb tenses consistent when describing the past: use “enjoy” after “would,” or “enjoyed” without “would.” Also change “in one lazy afternoon” to a more natural phrase such as “on a lazy afternoon,” and use “spent” instead of “spend.” Avoid repeating the idea of spending the summer.

示例: Yes, I had a bike as a child, and I loved riding it with my brother. During the summer, we would cycle around the park and sometimes meet our neighbors there. On a lazy afternoon, we might stop for ice cream before riding home.

建议: You give a clear reason for bikes’ popularity, but reduce repeated use of “So” and connect your ideas more smoothly. Say “For example, in the Philippines,” “one of the most convenient ways,” and “run errands” rather than “do their errants.” You could also make the final point more natural by saying that people ride bikes for leisure.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines, partly because traffic congestion is a serious problem. For many people, cycling is a convenient way to get to work or school and run errands. Bikes are also used for leisure, especially for short rides around the neighborhood.

× So during summertime we would bike around the park, meet our neighbors, enjoyed a cup of ice cream in one lazy afternoon, and that's how we spend our summertime.

✓ So during summertime we would bike around the park, meet our neighbors, and enjoy a cup of ice cream on a lazy afternoon, and that's how we spend our summertime.

When would describes a repeated past activity, it is followed by the base form of the verb. Therefore, enjoyed should be enjoy. Keep the verbs in the series parallel: would bike, meet, and enjoy.

× So during summertime we would bike around the park, meet our neighbors, enjoyed a cup of ice cream in one lazy afternoon, and that's how we spend our summertime.

✓ So during summertime we would bike around the park, meet our neighbors, and enjoy a cup of ice cream on a lazy afternoon, and that's how we spend our summertime.

Use on with a particular day or part of a day, such as on a lazy afternoon. In is not the appropriate preposition here.

× That's how we spend our summertime.

✓ That's how we spent our summertime.

The student is describing childhood experiences in the past, so the past-tense form spent is needed instead of the present-tense form spend.

× Bikes are one of the most convenient way as a mode of transportation for Filipinos to go to work, to go to school and do their errants.

✓ Bikes are one of the most convenient ways as a mode of transportation for Filipinos to go to work, to go to school and do their errants.

After one of the most, the noun should be plural because it refers to one item from a group. Use ways, not way.