自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: You answer the question and give a relevant detail, but several phrases are unclear or grammatically incorrect. Say “when I was a child,” use “as a birthday present,” and say “I used to ride it” rather than “I used to buy.” Keep the answer to two or three clear sentences and use the past tense consistently.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother gave it to me as a birthday present, and I used to ride it almost every day to play with my friends.

建议: Your answer begins with a clear opinion, but the rest is difficult to understand and does not clearly explain whether bikes are popular now. State your answer directly, then give one relevant reason or example. Use “in my country,” not “in my countries,” and avoid repeating words or restarting phrases.

示例: Yes, bikes are still quite popular in my country, especially in smaller towns. They are an affordable and convenient way to get around, although many people now use motorbikes or cars for longer journeys.

× Yes, of course, when I was dry, my mother, she bought a bike and she gave me like a present in my birthday and I use I used to buy every day to to go out and play with my friends.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, my mother bought me a bike as a present, and I used to ride it every day to go out and play with my friends.

In this sentence, my mother and she refer to the same person. Using both creates an unnecessary repeated subject pronoun. Say my mother bought rather than my mother, she bought.

× Yes, of course, when I was dry, my mother, she bought a bike and she gave me like a present in my birthday and I use I used to buy every day to to go out and play with my friends.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, my mother bought me a bike as a birthday present, and I used to ride it every day to go out and play with my friends.

Use as to describe the role of the gift: as a present. In this phrasing, birthday present does not need the preposition in. You can also say on my birthday if you mean the day the gift was given.

× Yes, of course, when I was dry, my mother, she bought a bike and she gave me like a present in my birthday and I use I used to buy every day to to go out and play with my friends.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, my mother bought me a bike as a birthday present, and I used to ride it every day to go out and play with my friends.

The answer describes a past childhood routine, so use a past form. Used to is appropriate for a repeated past activity. Remove the false start I use, and use ride a bike rather than buy a bike to describe the activity.

× Oh yes, of course by by already popular in my have already popular in my countries many, many years ago, because when in the history people in my country they don't have motorbike or cars just.

✓ Oh yes, of course. Bikes were already popular in my country many years ago because, historically, people there did not have motorbikes or cars.

The speaker is referring to one country, so use the singular country, not countries. Because the statement refers to people generally and motorbikes and cars are countable items, use the plural motorbikes and cars.

× Oh yes, of course by by already popular in my have already popular in my countries many, many years ago, because when in the history people in my country they don't have motorbike or cars just.

✓ Oh yes, of course. Bikes were already popular in my country many years ago because, historically, people there did not have motorbikes or cars.

Many years ago sets the answer in the past. Use were popular rather than have popular, and did not have rather than don't have. The phrase did not have uses the base form have after did.

× Oh yes, of course by by already popular in my have already popular in my countries many, many years ago, because when in the history people in my country they don't have motorbike or cars just.

✓ Oh yes, of course. Bikes were already popular in my country many years ago because, historically, people there did not have motorbikes or cars.

People in my country and they refer to the same subject. Do not repeat the subject with they; say people in my country did not have.

× Oh yes, of course by by already popular in my have already popular in my countries many, many years ago, because when in the history people in my country they don't have motorbike or cars just.

✓ Oh yes, of course. Bikes were already popular in my country many years ago because, historically, people there did not have motorbikes or cars.

When in the history is not the natural phrasing here. Use historically or in the past to introduce a general statement about an earlier period.

× Oh yes, of course by by already popular in my have already popular in my countries many, many years ago, because when in the history people in my country they don't have motorbike or cars just.

✓ Oh yes, of course. Bikes were already popular in my country many years ago because, historically, people there did not have motorbikes or cars.

The original contains repeated false starts and an unfinished ending with just, which makes the sentence structure incomplete. State the main idea in a complete sentence, followed by a complete because-clause.