自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答切题，也提到了学骑车时遇到的困难，但后半部分语法和表达不清，最后一句没有说完。“the the cycling I have”不符合英语表达；可以说“when I learned to ride it”。建议用过去时讲述经历，并补全结尾，说明别人如何帮助你以及最后的结果。

示例: Yes, I did. I had a small bike when I was a child, and I remember finding it difficult to learn how to ride it. I fell a few times and almost gave up, but my father helped me practise until I could ride on my own.

建议: 观点明确，也提到了骑车可以减压以及大城市这一背景。不过，“after the works”应改为“after work”，“people cycling”需要改为完整句式，例如“people cycle”，而“feel relax”应为“feel relaxed”。建议先直接回答，再用连接词说明骑车受欢迎的原因，并把“尤其是在大城市”融入完整句子。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in big cities. Many people cycle after work because it helps them relax and relieve stress. It is also a convenient way to get around when the roads are busy.

× I still remember the first time I started it, when I learned the the cycling I have.

✓ I still remember the first time I rode it, when I learned how to ride a bike.

原句中“when I learned the the cycling I have”结构不完整，无法表达清楚的意思。可以用“learn how to do something”表示“学会做某事”，因此改为“learned how to ride a bike”。

× I still remember the first time I started it, when I learned the the cycling I have.

✓ I still remember the first time I rode it, when I learned how to ride a bike.

“the the”重复使用了定冠词。英语中此处不需要重复冠词；改写为“how to ride a bike”后，表达也更自然、完整。

× But with assistance I had a breakthrough and.

✓ But with assistance, I had a breakthrough.

句末的“and”表示后面还应有并列内容，但句子没有继续完成，因此结构不完整。若没有要补充的内容，应删去“and”。

× Yeah, I think it's so popular in my country after the works, so many people cycling and they will feel relax and release their stress.

✓ Yeah, I think cycling is popular in my country after work, so many people cycle and feel relaxed and release their stress.

“work”表示日常工作这一活动时通常是不可数名词，不加复数词尾“-s”；此处也不需要定冠词“the”，所以应说“after work”。

× Yeah, I think it's so popular in my country after the works, so many people cycling and they will feel relax and release their stress.

✓ Yeah, I think cycling is popular in my country after work, so many people cycle and feel relaxed and release their stress.

“so many people cycling”缺少限定动词，不能独立构成完整分句。描述普遍习惯时，应使用一般现在时“so many people cycle”。

× Yeah, I think it's so popular in my country after the works, so many people cycling and they will feel relax and release their stress.

✓ Yeah, I think cycling is popular in my country after work, so many people cycle and feel relaxed and release their stress.

“feel”后面应接形容词来描述人的状态。此处应使用形容词“relaxed”（感到放松的），而不是动词“relax”。

× Especially in big cities.

✓ This is especially true in big cities.

原句是一个没有谓语动词的片段，不能独立构成完整句子。补上主语“This”和谓语“is”，即可表达“这种情况在大城市尤其如此”。