自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then describe the bike and explain how you used it. Use natural phrases such as “an attractive design” and “ride with my friends.” Correct the sentence structure by separating the ideas, and say “go to school” rather than “visit the school.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink and had a pretty princess design. I often rode it with my friends around our neighborhood, and sometimes we cycled to school together.

建议: State your opinion clearly and use “a popular form of transport” instead of “popular transportation.” Explain the environmental benefit with the phrase “reduce air pollution,” and connect your ideas with a linking word. Avoid the overly broad claim “every teenager”; use “many teenagers.”

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Korea, especially among teenagers. They are convenient for short journeys and help reduce air pollution. Many teenagers also enjoy riding fixed-gear bikes because they look stylish.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child it had innovative design and aesthetic appear such as the pink bike with a princess design.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It had an innovative design and an aesthetic appearance, such as a pink bike with a princess design.

The original joins two independent clauses without punctuation, creating a run-on sentence. Separate them with a period or join them with an appropriate conjunction.

× it had innovative design

✓ It had an innovative design.

The singular countable noun design needs an article. Use an because innovative begins with a vowel sound.

× aesthetic appear

✓ aesthetic appearance

A noun is needed after the adjective aesthetic. Appearance is the noun form; appear is a verb.

× I used to ride me my friends

✓ I used to ride with my friends

Use the preposition with to show that you rode together with your friends. Me is a pronoun and does not express this relationship.

× bikes are popular transportation in Korea

✓ Bikes are a popular means of transportation in Korea.

In this sentence, means is a singular countable noun and needs the article a. The phrase a popular means of transportation is a natural way to express this idea.

× many environments impacts

✓ many environmental impacts

Environmental is the adjective that describes impacts. Environments is a plural noun and does not correctly modify impacts here.

× Especially every teenager preferred to ride fixed gear bike.

✓ In particular, every teenager prefers to ride a fixed-gear bike.

The answer describes a general situation, so use the present-tense verb prefers rather than the past-tense verb preferred.

× ride fixed gear bike

✓ ride a fixed-gear bike

Bike is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a before fixed-gear bike.