自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 先直接回答“有”，再说明是谁买的、你什么时候骑以及和谁一起骑。开头的“This one I was just a teeny old”表达不清，建议改为“When I was a child”。注意时态一致：回忆过去时用“I liked”“I used to invite”；“in the afternoon”比“when it comes to afternoon”自然。“ride a bike”已表达骑车，不必再重复“roll the bike”。

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was quite young. I loved riding it because it made me feel free, and I often rode around with my friends in the afternoon.

建议: 先清楚表明“是的，很受欢迎”，然后用一两个具体原因展开。注意“there are lots of people like”应改为“lots of people like”或“there are lots of people who like”；泛指时用“ride bikes”。“easy to get placed”表达不自然，可改为“bikes are convenient for getting around”。最后的“from Hussuan Boston”意思不清，建议删去或换成明确的例子；避免把多个理由用“and”连成长句。

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. They’re a convenient way to get around, especially for short trips. Also, many people ride them for exercise or to relax after work.

× This one I was just a teeny old my father bought a bike for me.

✓ When I was just a teenager, my father bought a bike for me.

原句中“This one I was just a teeny old”结构不完整，且与后面的“my father bought...”之间缺少正确的连接方式。可以用“When I was...”引出时间状语从句，再接主句。

× I like riding it because it makes me feel free and when it comes to afternoon, I always invited my classmates or my friends to ride a bike, to roll the bike.

✓ I liked riding it because it made me feel free, and I always invited my classmates or friends to ride bikes in the afternoon.

这段话描述的是童年经历，整体应使用过去时。因此，将“like”“makes”改为“liked”“made”。“when it comes”也不适合这里的过去语境；调整为“in the afternoon”后，无须使用该从句。讲述过去的习惯时，也可以使用“used to”或“would”。

× when it comes to afternoon

✓ in the afternoon

表示“在下午”通常用“in the afternoon”，而不是“when it comes to afternoon”。注意固定搭配“in the morning / afternoon / evening”。

× Yes, I think so there are lots of people like riding bike because it's easy to get placed to ride bike and it is a great way to release their stress and it's a good way to from Hussuan Boston.

✓ Yes, I think so. There are lots of people who like riding bikes because it's easy to get places by bike, and it's a great way to release stress. The final phrase, “it's a good way to from Hussuan Boston,” is unclear in the transcript and cannot be corrected reliably.

“I think so”后面直接接“There are...”会造成句子连接不当，应断句。“There are lots of people like...”缺少连接从句的关系词，可改为“There are lots of people who like...”。最后的“it's a good way to from Hussuan Boston”结构不完整，而且意思无法从原文确定，因此不宜猜测其本意；建议核对录音后补全。

× lots of people like riding bike

✓ lots of people who like riding bikes

泛指骑自行车这项活动时，通常说“ride bikes”，而不是“ride bike”。“bike”是可数名词，泛指时应使用复数形式。