自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 質問には直接答えられていますが、過去の話なので「have」ではなく「had」を使いましょう。「alarm」は意味が不明確です。もし「一人で乗るのが怖かった」という意味なら「I was afraid to ride it alone」と表現できます。また、「ride a bike」の繰り返しを避け、父親がどのように助けてくれたかを具体的に一文で加えると、より自然で内容が伝わりやすくなります。

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I was afraid to ride it alone. My father helped me by holding the back of the seat while I practised.

建议: 自分の意見と理由を述べている点はよいですが、「I know」はこの文脈では不自然なので省き、「I don’t think so」で始めましょう。また、「most of the people」は「most people」、「the transportation」は「public transport」とすると自然です。「and so on」や「so」の繰り返しを避け、交通機関の利用と自転車に乗る機会の少なさを、接続語「because」や「as a result」で整理しましょう。

示例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in Japan, especially in large cities. Most people rely on public transport, such as trains and buses, because it is convenient. As a result, they may not have many opportunities to ride a bike.

× I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence refers to a past period, so use the past-tense form had instead of have.

× My father helped me to ride a bike when I ride a bike.

✓ My father helped me to ride a bike when I was learning to ride a bike.

The sentence describes something that happened in the past. Use the past progressive was learning to describe the activity in progress at that time.

× the transportation such as train and bus

✓ transportation such as trains and buses

Transportation is used generally here, so it does not need the definite article the.

× train and bus

✓ trains and buses

The sentence refers to types of public transportation in general, so use the plural forms trains and buses.