自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then describe the bike and explain what you did with your family. Avoid repeating similar adjectives such as “beautiful” and “pretty.” Use natural phrasing like “my family enjoyed spending time together,” and check verb forms and singular/plural agreement—for example, say “one of our favorite activities.”

示例: Yes, I did. I had a pretty pink bike that I loved riding. My family enjoyed spending time outdoors together, and my parents sometimes rode their bikes for exercise while I cycled alongside them.

建议: Give a clear answer and support it with a specific observation or reason. The phrase “I see industries” is unclear; use “I see people of all ages cycling.” Avoid unnatural phrases such as “cycling above are popular,” and connect your ideas with a linking phrase such as “because.”

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. I often see people of all ages cycling, especially in parks and around residential areas. They are an affordable and healthy way to get around, so both children and adults enjoy riding them.

× I had one a very beautiful pretty pink bike.

✓ I had a very pretty pink bike.

The sentence uses both one and a before the noun, creating a redundant determiner. Use a single determiner here: a. If you want to emphasize the number, say I had one very pretty pink bike.

× As far as my family like to spend time together, it was one of the most lovely activity for us in my childhood.

✓ Because my family liked spending time together, it was one of the loveliest activities for us during my childhood.

As far as usually means to the extent that, but the sentence needs a reason-and-result connector. Use because or since to introduce the reason.

× As far as my family like to spend time together, it was one of the most lovely activity for us in my childhood.

✓ Because my family liked spending time together, it was one of the loveliest activities for us during my childhood.

The sentence describes the past, as shown by it was and my childhood. Change the present-tense verb like to the past-tense form liked to keep the tense consistent.

× As far as my family like to spend time together, it was one of the most lovely activity for us in my childhood.

✓ Because my family liked spending time together, it was one of the loveliest activities for us during my childhood.

After one of the, the noun must be plural because the phrase refers to one member of a group. Change activity to activities.

× We did it when my parents for example to some exercises.

✓ We did it when my parents, for example, did some exercises.

The clause beginning with when has no finite verb: my parents is followed only by to do. Add did to make the clause complete. Use do some exercises, not to some exercises.

× I can be pretty sure that cycling above are popular for children and for adults too.

✓ I can be pretty sure that cycling is popular with children and adults, too.

Cycling is a singular gerund used as the subject, so it takes the singular verb is, not are. Use a singular verb when a gerund phrase is the subject.

× I can be pretty sure that cycling above are popular for children and for adults too.

✓ I can be pretty sure that cycling is popular with children and adults, too.

When describing something that people like, the usual preposition is with: popular with children. Use popular with or popular among before the group of people.

× They like to do it, it's cheap and healthy.

✓ They like it because it's cheap and healthy.

The original joins two independent clauses with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Join the ideas with a suitable conjunction, such as because, or separate them into two sentences.