自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Ответьте прямо и используйте естественные выражения: «when I was a child» вместо «where I was child» и «for my ninth birthday» вместо «in my birthday». Можно добавить конкретную деталь о велосипеде или о том, как вы на нём катались.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad bought me my first one for my ninth birthday, and I used to ride it around our neighborhood.

建议: Начните с уверенного прямого ответа и сократите слова-паразиты. Исправьте грамматику: «bikes are popular», «because they are affordable» и «cycling is good for your health». Для развития ответа добавьте конкретную причину, например, что велосипеды удобны для коротких поездок.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Russia, especially in the warmer months. They’re relatively affordable, and cycling is a healthy way to get around. People also use them for exercise and short trips.

× Yes, I used to have a bike where I was child.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child.

Where refers to a place, but the sentence refers to a time in the past. Use when for a time clause. Also, child is a singular countable noun and needs the article a.

× My dad bought my first bike when I was nine years old in my birthday.

✓ My dad bought my first bike when I was nine years old, on my birthday.

Use on before a specific day or birthday, not in. In this context, on my birthday is the correct expression.

× Oh, I don't know, uh, but I think, uh, bikes, uh, a popular in Russia since is, uh, very affordable and very good activity and uh, this helps for your health.

✓ Oh, I don't know, but I think bikes are popular in Russia because they are very affordable, and cycling is a very good activity that helps your health.

The plural subject bikes requires the plural verb are. Use are popular, not a popular. The clause also needs a subject and verb: they are very affordable. Use because to clearly introduce the reason.

× Oh, I don't know, uh, but I think, uh, bikes, uh, a popular in Russia since is, uh, very affordable and very good activity and uh, this helps for your health.

✓ Oh, I don't know, but I think bikes are popular in Russia because they are very affordable, and cycling is a very good activity that helps your health.

Activity is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a very good activity.

× Oh, I don't know, uh, but I think, uh, bikes, uh, a popular in Russia since is, uh, very affordable and very good activity and uh, this helps for your health.

✓ Oh, I don't know, but I think bikes are popular in Russia because they are very affordable, and cycling is a very good activity that helps your health.

The verb help does not take for before its direct object in this construction. Say helps your health, or use is good for your health.