自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 先直接回答问题，再补充自行车是什么时候、由谁送的。注意使用过去时：童年经历用“had”，而不是“have”；“bike”不要误说成“bag”。“七岁生日礼物”可表达为“a birthday present for my seventh birthday”，“是父母送的”可说“my parents gave it to me”。避免重复说“gift”，并把零散短句连成完整句子。

示例: Yes, I did. I had a blue bike when I was a child, and my parents gave it to me for my seventh birthday. I used to ride it around our neighborhood.

建议: 开头直接表明自行车是否受欢迎，然后用具体、合理的观察或用途解释原因。注意“lots of bikes”要用复数，“beside”表示“在……旁边”，而“besides”通常表示“此外”；停放的自行车可说“parked along the road”。删掉不自然且重复的“So I see”，并避免仅凭路边停放的自行车就得出结论。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. They’re an affordable and convenient way to get around, and many people use them for short trips or to commute to work. You can often see bike-sharing bicycles parked near bus stops and shopping areas.

× I have a bag when I was in my elementary school.

✓ I had a bag when I was in my elementary school.

句子中的 when I was 表示过去，因此主句的 have 也要用过去式 had。回答过去发生的事情时，要保持句子的时态一致。

× when I was in my elementary school that this bike is my seven years old birthday gift

✓ When I was in elementary school, this bike was a gift for my seventh birthday.

原句用 that 将两个意思不同的部分生硬连接起来，导致句子结构不清。可将它们分成主从句或独立句，并用逗号清楚地连接。

× my seven years old birthday gift

✓ a gift for my seventh birthday

seven years old 通常用来描述人的年龄，不能直接放在 birthday gift 前作定语。表示“七岁生日”时，应使用序数词 seventh，例如 my seventh birthday。

× Gift by my parents.

✓ It was a gift from my parents.

原句只有名词 gift 和介词短语 by my parents，没有完整的谓语动词，因此是句子片段。补上主语 It 和谓语 was 后，句子才完整；表达“来自父母的礼物”通常用 a gift from my parents。

× you can see lots of bike

✓ you can see lots of bikes

lots of 表示“许多”，后面需要接可数名词复数。bike 是可数名词，因此应改为 bikes。

× besides the road

✓ beside the road

beside 表示“在……旁边”，符合自行车停在路边的意思；besides 通常表示“除……之外”或“此外”，不适合此处。